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The two pie charts compare students’ responses to a survey about fundamental reasons to go to a specific university in the UK in the years 1987 and 2007.

It is clear that university course fitness was the most important concern in both years. While distance to parents’ house was the least concerned in 1987, it had become the second most important reason to study at a UK college by 2007

In 1987, 35% of students choosing a particular UK university rated suitable degree courses as their number-one-worry, which was considerably higher than the percentages of the two second most common concerns, quality of studying resources and provision of sport and social activities, 21% and 19% respectively. The quality of educational teaching came next at 15%, while just 10% of students who went to a UK tertiary education worried about the closeness to their parents’ house.

By 2007, the amount of students concerning university course suitability rose slightly by 2% to 37%. In contrast, the worries related to supporting for sport and other social activities saw a dramatic decrease to a mere 6%. There was a growing concern for the proximity to parental home with the figure reaching 22%, whereas the quality of available resources fell slightly by 3% and the teaching quality saw a small rise.

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It is clear that university course fitness was the most important concern in both years

----> hình như câu này không đúng như pie chart bạn à, theo mình thì suitable degree courses were (vì 2 năm này đều ở qk nên mình dùng were) the most important concern in both year;

 

In contrast, the worries related to supporting for sport and other social activities saw a dramatic decrease to a mere 6%

Theo mình thì ko nên dùng saw mà thay vào đó là witnessed sẽ hay hơn

 

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