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Firstly, a certificate from college or university is mostly indispensable to apply for a job. Many companies require their employees to have certificate in their fields, which improves they’re qualified enough to apply for the job. If a person who don’t have necessary certificates, it will very hard for them to find a good job, so almost people attend college or university after graduating from high school.

Secondly, students can improve their social skills as they have opportunities to meet educated people. Living in this environment makes students meet many people: friends, professors, …which helps students more confident and good at communication. They also have to be self-conscious and saving when dealing with many difficulties about finance and studying.

Finally, studying at college or university helps students enhance knowledge and experience. They will receive information about many aspects in life such as information technology, digital systems, biology, etc. Each field supplies students relevant knowledge, which helps them to be qualified enough to attain higher goals in life.

In conclusions, attending college and university not only helps students keep pace with changes in society but also train them to get experience and necessary knowledge about their careers and brings numerous benefits to students, which is the reason why students attend to it.

 

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Firstly, a certificate from college or university is mostly indispensable to applying for a job. Many companies require their employees to have certificates in their fields, which improves they’re qualified enough to apply for do the job. If a person who don’t does not have necessary certificates, it will very hard for them him or her to find a good job, so almost people attend college or university after graduating from high school.

Secondly, students can improve their social skills as they have opportunities to meet educated people. Living in this environment makes students meet many people: friends, professors, …which helps students be more confident and good at communication. They also have to be self-conscious and saving when dealing with many difficulties about finance and study.

Finally, studying at college or university helps students enhance knowledge and experience. They will receive information about many aspects in life such as information technology, digital systems, biology, etc. Each field supplies students with relevant knowledge, which helps them to be qualified enough to attain higher goals in life.

In conclusions, attending college and university not only helps students keep pace with changes in society but also train them to get experience and necessary knowledge about their careers and brings numerous benefits to students, which is the reason why students attend to it.

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