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(Mọi người góp ý giúp em với ạ) Task 2: Living in big cities is bad for your health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

      Recently, our environment has been in the limelight and have aroused wide concern for the negative impacts on human’s survival associated with them. As a consequence, many people argue that living in a big city can result seriously on their health. Personally, I totally agree with this point of view.
      We have nearly exhausted natural resource and left a big carbon footprint on a fragile planet. Undoubtedly, it may lead to a bad effect on our life, particularly in the city. Firstly, more and more company and industrial zones have been discharging chemical waste into the river, causing death to many fish and aquatic life, and without control, production processes may result in environmental degradation such as global warming stemming from factory emissions and the irresponsible disposal of industrial waste. Secondly, our activities are increasing the greenhouse effect, making the earth hotter and endangering not only mankind but also all life on the planet. For instance, the food we eat every day is almost covering by contaminated ingredients that have higher risk of developing several chronic illnesses such as heart disease, diabetes, some form of cancer and obesity
      While there have been numerous international conferences to warn of the danger, many governments have refused to take an action. We are, therefore, can assist in the effort to alleviate the environmental problems in the local community through simple actions such as planting trees in the garden, recycling waste and enhancing awareness of people. Furthermore, we can reduce our carbon footprint by flying less and reduce food miles by buying local produce. People should also make aware of the need to cut down on emissions from their cars if we are to reduce air pollution. This way can help to bring us a fresh life.
      In sum, no effort is too small when we are protecting the environment. Meanwhile, both local authorities and citizens must shoulder responsibilities in order to have a good health. Only by doing so, we can assure that we could hand this beautiful planet to our generation and the next generation after.
 
 
Theo mọi người thì bài này được tầm band bao nhiêu ạ. Em cảm ơn
 

 

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Recently, our environment has been in the limelight and have aroused wide concern over the negative impacts on human survival associated with them. As a consequence, many people argue that living in a big city can seriously affect on their health. Personally, I totally agree with this point of view.
      We have nearly exhausted natural resources and left a big carbon footprint on a fragile planet. Undoubtedly, it may lead to a bad effect on our life, particularly in cities. Firstly, more and more companies and industrial zones have been discharging chemical waste into the rivers, causing death to many fish and aquatic life. Without control, production processes may result in environmental degradation such as global warming stemming from factory emissions and the irresponsible disposal of industrial waste. Secondly, our activities are increasing the greenhouse effect, making the earth hotter and endangering not only mankind but also all life forms on the planet. For instance, the food we eat every day is almost covering by contaminated by the ingredients that increase the risk of developing several chronic illnesses such as heart diseases, diabetes, and some forms of cancer and obesity
      While there have been numerous international conferences to warn of the danger, many governments have refused to take an action. We are, therefore, can able to assist in the effort to alleviate the environmental problems in the local communities through the simple actions such as planting trees in the gardens, recycling waste and enhancing public awareness of people. Furthermore, we can reduce our carbon footprint by flying less and reduce food miles by buying local produce. People should also make be aware of the need to cut down on emissions from their cars if we are to reduce air pollution. These ways can help to bring us a fresh life.
      In sum, no effort is too small when we are protecting the environment. Meanwhile, both local authorities and citizens must shoulder responsibilities in order to have a good health. Only by doing so, we can assure that we could hand this beautiful planet to our generation and the next generations afterwards.
 
Chú ý: bài viết bị lạc đề vì không trả lời câu hỏi của đề bài.
Theo bạn, bài viết này được bao nhiêu "chấm" ?
đã góp ý 7 Tháng 5, 2017 bởi jshowart (443 điểm)
được bầu chọn là bài viết hay nhất 7 Tháng 5, 2017 bởi Minh Tu
Cảm ơn bạn nhiều nhé!
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wide concern --> deep concern

the negative impacts on --> adverse impacts on

a bad effect --> a harmful effect

mankind --> humanity

In sum --> In conclusion

shoulder responsibilities for ?

a big carbon footprint --> a huge carbon footprint

living in a big city --> living in a large city

Firstly, more and more company and industrial zones have been discharging chemical waste into the river

Firstly, factories in industrial zones have been discharging chemical waste into rivers

the food we eat every day --> the sources of food, which we consume on daily basis

Đây là các collocations bạn nên sửa

Theo bạn, bài viết này được bao nhiêu "chấm" ?
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