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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

 

It is true that there is an increasing influence of modern technologies on the way people build their relationships these days. Technology has affected the relationships between people in various ways, and I strongly believe that this development brings more advantages than drawbacks.

Modern technologies have impacts on people’s relationships in many aspects such as business, family, and social life. Firstly, with the aid of the Internet, a company can cooperate with another company overseas to broaden their market. Secondly, thanks to the development of state-of-the-art applications like Skype or Zalo, overseas students can keep in touch with their family and call them easily, which seems impossible in the last few decades. Finally, People nowadays can make friends online and follow their friends’ life activities through some applications like Facebook or Instagram. For example, a Vietnamese can make friend with an American through Facebook without ever meeting him.

The rapid development of technology and its effects on humans’ relationships have brought more benefits than negative sides. First of all, corresponding to its effects in business, modern gadgets such as emails, online websites, and telecommunications… have helped to push the business of companies more convenient. For example, beside the traditional way of selling goods, nowadays, companies can use e-commerce to approach customers easier. Secondly, if it takes letters days or months to deliver to their friends, people now just need to text on messenger and the text will be sent immediately.

In conclusion, with the help of modern technologies, it seems to be easier for people in building their relationships in business, family and social life. And positive side is outweighed negative side.

(272 words- by Sang Tran)

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It is true that there is an increasing influence of modern technologies on the way people build their relationships these days. Technology has affected the relationships between people in various ways, and I strongly believe that this development brings more advantages than drawbacks.

It is true that there is an increasing influence of modern technologies on the way people build their relationships these days. Technology has affected the relationships between people in various ways, and I strongly believe that this development brings more advantages than drawbacks.

Modern technologies have impacts on people’s relationships in many aspects such as business, family, and social life. Firstly, with the aid of the Internet, a company can cooperate with another company overseas to broaden their market. Secondly, thanks to the development of state-of-the-art applications like Skype or Zalo, overseas students can keep in touch with their family and call them easily, which seems impossible in the last few decades. Finally, People nowadays can make friends online and follow their friends’ life activities through some applications like Facebook or Instagram. For example, a Vietnamese can make friend with an American through Facebook without ever meeting him.

Modern technologies have impacts on people’s human relationships in many aspects such as business, family, and social life. Firstly, with the aid of the Internet, a company can cooperate with another overseas company to broaden their its market. Secondly, thanks to the development of the state-of-the-art applications like Skype or Zalo, overseas students can keep in touch with their families and call them easily, which seemed impossible in the last few decades. Finally, people nowadays can make friends online and follow their friends’ life activities through some applications like Facebook or Instagram. For example, a Vietnamese can make friend with an American through Facebook without ever meeting him.

The rapid development of technology and its effects on humans’ relationships have brought more benefits than negative sides. First of all, corresponding to its effects in business, modern gadgets such as emails, online websites, and telecommunications… have helped to push the business of companies more convenient. For example, beside the traditional way of selling goods, nowadays, companies can use e-commerce to approach customers easier. Secondly, if it takes letters days or months to deliver to their friends, people now just need to text on messenger and the text will be sent immediately.

The rapid development of technology and its effects on human relationships have brought more benefits than negative sides. First of all, corresponding to its effects in business, modern gadgets such as emails, online websites, and telecommunications… have helped to push make the business processes of companies more convenient. For example, beside the traditional way of selling goods, nowadays, companies can use e-commerce to approach customers more easily. Secondly, if it takes letters days or months to be delivered to their friends, people now just need to text on Messenger and the texts will be sent immediately.

In conclusion, with the help of modern technologies, it seems to be easier for people in building their relationships in business, family and social life. And positive side is outweighed negative side.

In conclusion, with the help of modern technologies, it seems to be easier for people to build their relationships in business, family and social life. And Thus, the positive side is outweighsed the negative side.

 

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