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With the pressure on today's young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that students can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?

Stepping 21st centuries, most of young people think that non-academic subjects should be removed from curriculum. It will help students focus on the academically subject. However, in my opinion, all subjects in syllabus will be useful for students when they work without experience.

For creation of curriculum, professors of university had some research to explore which subjects students need at the school. For instant, communication subject in computer science program will help students easy understand others and work n international environment.

For students who have passed the entrance examination will do not know the all benefits of subjects in the syllabus. For example, chemistry students will study information technology subject; and generally they did not know why they are study it. But in working at company, that knowledge helps them can use the software for analysis and statistic results from their works.

In conclusion, I think that the subjects at school are only background knowledge for students n work or research. Therefore, the eliminating subjects from syllabus is no need for concentrate on academic subjects.

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Stepping in 21st centuries, most of young people think that non-academic subjects should be removed from curriculum. It will help students focus on the academically / academical subject. However, in my opinion, all subjects in syllabus will be useful for students when they work without experience. 

For creation of curriculum, professors of university had some research to explore which subjects students need at the school. For instant, communication subject in computer science program will help students easy understand easily others and have more chances to work in international environment. 

For students who have passed the entrance examination will do not know the all benefits of subjects in the syllabus. For example, chemistry students will study information technology subject; and generally they did not know why they are study it. But in working at company, that knowledge helps them can use the software for analysing and statistic results from their works. ( bạn cần để ý phân biệt tính từ và động từ) 

In conclusion, I think that the subjects at school are only background knowledge for students n work or research. Therefore, the eliminating subjects from syllabus is no need for concentrate on academic subjects.

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