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Task 1: The two maps below show an islans, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

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The diagram illustrates the transformation of an island with the advent of tourism.

Looking at the picture, it can be seen that significant changes have taken places in the island for tourism purposes. Overall, the new construction not only helps visitors to access this island by sea but also provides them with accommodation.

Guest houes has became essential requirment of resorts, so one occupied the majority of its area and connected with each other by footpath. At the centre of dwelling, there is a reception, move to the north of which a restaurant.

As well as the buildings mentioned above, the new facilities on this island also include a pier, where boats can dock. From there, visitors are transported to the reception by vehicles track. On the west of island, the beach has now been converted into the swimming area, where guests can easily access using the footpath.

 

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- Bài viết của bạn chỉ mới có 148 từ.

- Đoạn 2 bạn nên bắt đầu bằng những từ như It is clear that, It is noticeable that, Overall,...

- Bạn viết sai chính tả các từ : Guest houes => Guest houses

"has became"=> has become

- "Guest houes has became essential requirment of resorts, so one occupied the majority of its area and connected with each other by footpath. At the centre of dwelling, there is a reception, move (SHOULD BE MOVING) to the north of which a restaurant. 

As well as the buildings mentioned above, the new facilities on this island also include a pier, where boats can dock. From there, visitors are transported to the reception by vehicles track. On the west of island, the beach has now been converted into the swimming area, where guests can easily access using the footpath."

=> TENSES của bạn không đồng nhất , bạn nên sử dụng THÌ QUÁ KHỨ ĐƠN CHO CẢ 2 ĐOẠN 3 VÀ 4.

- Sửa: "The diagram illustrates the transformation before and after of an island with the advent of tourism."

- Bạn nên đề cập hay giới thiệu đến cả 2 việc before and after construction, mình thì thấy bài bạn chỉ mới có after mà cũng nói không rõ để khẳng định cái" after" đấy nữa.  Ngoài ra, bạn nên nói thêm nữa về ( hoặc miêu tả ) các khu vực xung quanh trên chỗ nhà nghỉ đó nữa.

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The diagram illustrates the transformation of an island with the advent of tourism.

Looking at the picture, it can be seen that significant changes have taken places in the island for tourism purposes. Overall, the new construction not only helps visitors to access this island by sea but also provides them with accommodation.

Guest houes house has became become essential requirment requirement of resorts, so one occupied the majority of its area and connected with each other by footpath. At the centre of dwelling, there is a reception, move to the north of which a restaurant.

As well as the buildings mentioned above, the new facilities on this island also include a pier, where boats can dock. From there, visitors are transported to the reception by vehicles track. On the west of island the Island, the beach has now been converted into the swimming area, where guests can easily access using the footpath.

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