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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


‘’How do celebrities become famous?’’. That question has become a source of controversy over in the world. The rational of this question is less clear and dependent on individual opinion. The most answers received are by their glamour, wealth and a lot kind of scandals to increase bad influence on young generation. Based on experience, I definitely agree with them. There are two reasons for my perspective on this
First of it , Causing negative effects and bad example on young people .The message to young people is that success is can be achieved easily is an obvious evidence. Some people think that the more scandals celebrities get, the more famous they are. Consequently, if one wants to be famous, one must know how to get glamour and wealth. No matter how illegal one is trying to. Can you imagine when it becomes a theory that so hard does one work that one gets nothing at all. There, school works is not necessary. Paris Hilton known by scandals. She spends the most of times attending parties and nightclubs instead of training to become good character. She is a good example for who achieved fame by wrong reasons. Moreover, they are bad role models that young people trend to follow. Not only have celebrities used their glamour and wealthy to be known, but also they have used such as: alcohol ,marihuana, sexual harassments, outrageous words ,….. 
However, there are many celebrities whose accomplishments to be developed real skills and abilities for young people. When they appear on magazines reality program, they always feel confident because they are self –made celebrities .As celebrities, it is inevitable to avoid scandals. In my opinion, they know how to fix any problem with the slightest of the ease. Not them have they exploited to get attention from audiences 
In conclusion, everything is ‘’easy come easy go”. Only when one works so hard, does one get what one wants. I recommend all celebrity‘s fan to separate their good stuffs to study and bad stuffs to avoid

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‘’How do celebrities become famous?’’. That question has become a source of controversy over in the world. The rational of this question is less clear and dependent on individual opinion. The most answers received are by their glamour, wealth and a lot kind of scandals to increase bad influence on young generation. Based on experience, I definitely agree with them. There are two reasons for my perspective on this => mình thấy MB này dài, không rõ ràng, không ăn khớp với những gì bạn viết ở TB, bạn có thể tham khảo MB này: 

It is widely argued that nowadays celebrities are better known for their beauty and luxurious lifestyles than their accomplishment. While I accept that some of them set a bad example for youngsters, I believe that others act as positive role models. 

In conclusion, everything is ‘’easy come easy go”. Only when one works so hard, does one get what one wants. I recommend all celebrity‘s fan to separate their good stuffs to study and bad stuffs to avoid => trước khi recommend bạn nên tóm tắt lại nội dung bài viết nhé: 

 

In conclusion, it seems to me that celebrities have both positive and negative influence on young people. I recommend that all celebrities' fan should... 

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