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Topic: Some people feel that popular icons such as sports or movie stars play an important part in shaping the charater of young people because they may act as a role models.
To what extent do you agree/ disagree?
 
  Celeberities definitely have more of a global presence and influence on young people’s lives today than in previous years. Since that, I believe they are responsible for setting a good example for their fans, especially for young ones.
  For one point, the beautiful images and soul of personalities give the inspiration for other to follow. For instance, Dicaprio who is a famous movie star has just released a film about protecting the environment. This might lead his fans to take action to make the Earth better and clearer. This case also illutrates the points that famous people encourage good behaviours through their own action.
  For another point, in the light of the fact that teenagers are very impressionable, any inappropriate behaviour from their idols might be imitate, which makes misconduct of celebrity unceptionable. I find it is not good for students with dyed hair going to school. Therefore, the idols’ behaviour influency other ordinary people, especially blindly following ones without thinking.
  In conclusion, it is true that  peope in the limelight play a crucial role for the purpose of shaping the other’s charater by their good behaviour.
 

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Celebrities definitely have more of a global presence and influence on young people’s lives today than in previous years. Since that, I believe they are responsible for setting a good example for their fans, especially for young ones. 
  At one point, the beautiful images and soul of personalities give the inspiration for others to follow. For instance, Dicaprio who is a famous movie star has just released a film about protecting the environment. This might lead his fans to take action to make the Earth better and clearer. This case also illustrates the points that famous people encourage good behaviors through their own action. 
  For another point, in the light of the fact that teenagers are very impressionable, any inappropriate behavior from their idols might be imitated, which makes misconduct of celebrity unexceptionable. I find it is not good for students with dyed hair going to school. Therefore, the idols’ behavior influences other ordinary people, especially blindly following ones without thinking. 
  In conclusion, it is true that people in the limelight play a crucial role for the purpose of shaping the other’s character by their good behavior. 
 
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