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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays. most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. So, which is better : living in the large city or a small comunity. The advantages and disavantages when we lived in small villages. 
In my opinion, there were four main benefit. Firstly, people in small villages always knew each other, so when someone got into troubles, everyone in the villages would help to solve the problems. Sencondly, the people who lived in small villages were very friendly and generous. The inhabitants were in a quiet way of life. Next, the children in there could grow up in natural way. They did not play video games or watched TV a lot, they could play with many friends, and they enjoyed doing outdoor activities more than indoor activities. Also, the atmosphere in small villages is cleaner and fresher than in large cities, so the people were in a healthy lifestyle. 
However, I think the disadvantages of living in a small comunity were education, healthcare and technology. Firstly, people lived in small villages would be backward because they could not approach to advanced sciene and technology. The children in a small village also could not access to the better education. They did not learn with modern education facilities. The schools were too far and there was no public transports, so the children went to school very difficult. The other site, people did not get good healthcare, they were treated in the absence of medical equipments because the hospitals were located too far away the villages. 
All in all, I think the people who lived in small villages were happier. The children lived in a small comunity grown up healthy, they have better health and less illnesses. The inhabitants formed a stronger relationship, they helped each other when they had problems. However, if young people were ambitious, they had to move away from the village, they did not want to be limited to a small villages. Nowadays, there are more advantages to living in a large city.

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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. So which is better: the question is whether living in a small community better than in a big city. The advantages and disadvantages when we lived in small villages.

In my opinion, there were four main benefits. Firstly, people in small villages always know each other, so when someone get into troubles, everyone in the villages would help to solve the problems. Secondly, the people who live in small villages are very friendly and generous. The inhabitants are in live a quiet way of life. Next, the children in there could grow up in a natural way. They do not play video games or watch TV a lot, they could can play with many friends, and they enjoy doing outdoor activities more than indoor activities. Also, the atmosphere in small villages is cleaner and fresher than in large cities, so the people are in have a healthy lifestyle. 

However, I think the disadvantages of living in a small community are education, healthcare and technology. Firstly, people live in small villages would be are considered backward because they can not approach to advanced science and technology. The children in a small village also can not access to the better education. They don’t learn with have modern education facilities. The schools are too far away and there are no public transports, so it is very difficult for the children to go to school very difficult. The other site Moreover, people do not get good healthcare, they are treated in the absence of medical equipment because hospitals are located too far away from the villages. 

All in all, I think the people who live in small villages are happier. The children who live in a small community grow up healthier, they have better health and less illnesses. The inhabitants form a strong relationship and they help each other when they have problems. However, if for young people who are ambitious and do not want to be limited to a small village , they had to can move away from the village. Nowadays, there are more advantages when living in a large city.

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In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew each other. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. The question is which way of life brings better living condition and experience.

In my opinion, there are four main benefits of living in a small community. Firstly, small villages’ residents are often aware of their people’ circumstances and could provide necessary and timely supports. Secondly, the peaceful and slow-paced rural life often makes its people become friendlier and more generous compared to urban residents. Next, the children are healthier growing up with a rural lifestyle. They often have a larger circle of friends and spend more time playing outdoor while cities’ children playing video games or watch TV alone.  Also, the environment in small villages is generally cleaner compared to the cities’ which often brings good effects to the people’s health.

However, I think the disadvantages of rural life concern the difficulties in approaching high-quality education, healthcare and technology. First, villagers are often considered backward as it is not easy for them to access advanced technology. Moreover, the quality of education in rural areas is also lower than in big cities due to the lack of modern education facilities and public transports. The same conditions apply for health care system as many local hospital lacks of advanced medical equipment and qualified doctors.

All in all, I think the people in small villages are happier considering the close relationships and supports from the community, healthy children and fresh environment. However, for young people who want to experience high-quality modern life, there are many opportunities await in big cities.
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