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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Reading news on the Internet has increased its popularity recently. While some people argue that newspaper still plays the pivotal role in modern society, I firmly believe that it will be  the Internet that become dominant due to the benefits it offers.

       Firstly, the cost of traditional newspaper is enormous that make it less competitive than the others way to bring people news.  Newspaper production is characteristics of deforestation from which a great number of woods is chopped in order to print paper. Moreover, transportation fees and printing costs should not be taken for granted. Another significant factor that leads to the deciline of newspaper is that this traditional way does not  bring news as fast as TV or the Internet does . For example , newspaper is published once a day in the early morning so the readers have to wait till the next morning print publication to realize what happened last afternoon , while nowadays things are totally diffirent because of the information technology progress.

       Specificly, online platforms facilitate fast-moving and immediate news updates will be the optimal solution to satisfy increasing demand and busy news seekers. Furthermore, the Internet provides a range of websites which help readers find out the truth by comparing the diffirence between the sources of information. Another one and also the most important reason for the popularity of online news is that online news is free to read, opposed to the fact that newspaper costs fees.

 

       In conclusion, I totally disagree with the idea that printed newspaper would hold its impregnable position like it used to do because more and more people are being drawn to the Internet.

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Reading news on the Internet has increased its popularity recently. While some people argue that newspaper still plays the pivotal role in modern society, I firmly believe thatit will be  the Internet that become dominant due to the benefits it offers.

---> a pivotal role

       Firstly, the cost of traditional newspaper is enormous that make it less competitive than the others way to bring people news.  Newspaper production is characteristics of deforestation from which a great number of woods is chopped in order to print paper.

......, while nowadays things are totally diffirent because of the information technology progress.

---> is enormous, which makes it (by the way báo giấy cũng đâu có đắt tới mức enormous)

---> other ways

---> characteristic

---> progression (sự tiến bộ là progression chuẩn hơn progress)

 

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       Specificly, online platforms facilitate fast-moving and immediate news updates will be the optimal solution to satisfy increasing demand and busy news seekers. Furthermore, the Internet provides a range of websites which help readers find out the truth by comparing the diffirence between the sources of information. Another one and also the most important reason for the popularity of online news is that online news is free to read, opposed to the fact that newspaper costs fees.

---> Meanwhile (Specifically không hợp nghĩa)

---> facilitating/ which falicitate

---> the increasing demand of busy news seekers

(demand và seekers không tương đương, không nên dùng and)

---> wide range/ extensive range

---> differences

---> Another reason and also the most important explanation for....

Dùng another one thì chữ one hơi tối nghĩa, không biết one là cái gì hay thay thế cho cái gì? Mình gợi ý sửa lại như trên)

 

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online news is free to read, opposed to the fact that newspaper costs fees.       

---> as opposed to the fact that....

In conclusion, I totally disagree with the idea that printed newspaper would hold its impregnable position like it used to do because more and more people are being drawn to the Internet.

---> retain

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