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PARAGRAPH : Protect the enviroment of our school

Nowadays, the enviroment of our school is getting more and more pollute,so I think we should take action to protect them.Firstly, we do not throw rubbish inside or outside classrooms. It is easy to put our wastes in dustbins instead of throwing away. Secondly, we should not write or draw anything on desks or walls. I suppose that this action is not good because we are destroying the school property. Furthermore, the classrooms should be cleaned every day by not eating or making too many litters at chool. Finally, we should water trees and plants at school regularly. Morever, planting more trees help us to respiratory benefit and limit air pollution. In clusion, these ways bring us manu benefit becaus it is not only protect enviroment of school but only make us to become more healthy.
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1. You wrote: Nowadays, the enviroment of our school is getting more and more pollute,.... ( enviroment -> environment ; pollute -> polluted)

2. You wrote:  the classrooms should be cleaned every day by not eating or making too many litters at chool. (chool -> school)

3.You wrote: Morever, planting more trees help us to respiratory benefit and limit air pollution. (Morever -> Moreover)

4. You wrote: In clusion, these ways bring us manu benefit becaus it is not only protect enviroment of school but only make us to become more healthy.  ( In clusion -> in conclusion; manu -> many; benefit -> benefits; it is not only protect -> is not only protected ; to become -> become)

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đã góp ý 10 Tháng 9, 2016 bởi phuongthao1611 (35 điểm)
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Bài này chắc là speaking 

Nowadays, the environment of our school is getting more and more polluted,so I think we should take action to protect them.Firstly, we do not throw rubbish inside or outside classrooms. It is easy to put our wastes in dustbins instead of throwing away. Secondly, we should not write or draw anything on desks or walls. I suppose that this action is not good because we are destroying the school property. Furthermore, the classrooms should be cleaned every day by not eating or making too many litters at chool. Finally, we should water trees and plants at school regularly. Moreover, planting more trees help us to respiratory benefit and limit air pollution. In conclusion, these ways bring us manu benefit becaus it is not only protect enviroment of school but only make us to become more healthy.
 

 

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đã góp ý 10 Tháng 9, 2016 bởi dinhnhobaotst (7 điểm)
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There is no doubt that  the environment of our school is getting increasingly polluted,so from my point of view, we should take action to protect them.First of all, we do not throw rubbish inside or outside classrooms. It is easy to put our wastes in dustbins instead of throwing away. Secondly, we should not write or draw anything on desks or walls .I suppose that this action is not good because we are destroying the school property. Furthermore, the classrooms should be cleaned every day by not eating or making too many litters at chool. Finally, we should water trees and plants at school regularly. Moreover, planting more trees helps us to respiratory benefit and limit air pollution. In conclusion, these ways bring us many advantages because it not only protects enviroment of school but only makes us become more healthy.

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đã góp ý 10 Tháng 9, 2016 bởi peace peace (28 điểm)
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Nowadays, the environment of our school is getting more and more polluted (ở đây "pollute" là ngoại động từ mà sau "more" phải là 1 tính từ),so I think we should take action to protect them.Firstly, we do not throw rubbish inside or outside classrooms. It is easy to put our wastes in dustbins instead of throwing away. Secondly, we should not write or draw anything on desks or walls. I suppose that this action is not good because we are destroying the school property. Furthermore, the classrooms should be cleaned every day by not eating or making too many litters at school. Finally, we should water trees and plants at school regularly. Moreover, planting more trees help us to respiratory benefit and limit air pollution. In conclusion, these ways bring us manu many benefits because it is not only protect enviroment of school but only make us to become more healthy. (câu cuối mink k0 hiểu rõ lắm, bn có thể giải thick cho mink đc k0? bn đã dùng "not only" (k0 chỉ) mà sau đó còn dùng "bút" (những) nên mink k0 hiểu đc ý của bn là j)

bn còn sai lối chính tả nhiều và 1 só chỗ thiếu, mink đã sửa cho bn. Chúc bạn học giỏi.

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đã góp ý 11 Tháng 9, 2016 bởi truclamyt (147 điểm)
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Nowadays, the environment of our school is getting more and more polluted,so I think we should take action (hoặc tốt hơn là 'do sth') to protect them.Firstly, we do must not throw rubbish inside or outside classrooms. It is easy to put our wastes in dustbins instead of throwing away. Secondly, we should not write or draw anything on desks or walls. I suppose that this action is not good because we are destroying the school property. Furthermore, the classrooms should be cleaned every day everyday by not eating or making too many litters anything harmful at chool. Finally, we should water trees, flowers and plants at school regularly. Moreover, planting more trees help us to respiratory benefit and limit air pollution. In clusion addition (hoặc 'conclusion'), these ways bring us manu many benefits because it is not only protected enviroment of school but only make us to become more healthy healthier.

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