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IELTS TASK 1 - The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country.

The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given charts compare changes in the shares of seven different items which comprised the monthly expenses of two distinct groups in an European country.

Overall, while the food and fuel represent the largest proportions in the low income group’s expenditure, the wealthier tend to spend most on miscellaneous and socializing activities.

It can be seen from the first chart that food products account for the most significant share of expenditure (29%), which is slightly higher compared to the figure of fuel (25%). Miscellaneous and socializing activities hold rather minuscule shares, constituted 18% and 11%, respectively. The proportions of restaurant and hotel, transport and clothing are responsible for less than a fifth of all expenditures, whereas the expenses on garments and luxury diners are approximately equal with 5% and 4% each, a double is the amount spent on conveyance (9%).

Regarding to the given second chart, while miscellaneous experience the largest contribution with nearly a fourth of all expenses (23%), followed by the budget spent on recreational and cultural activities (21%), the figure of food and beverage is negligible at 15%, slightly overtake the restaurant and hotel proportion (12%), however, still rank at fourth place as 16% is the share of transportation. The fuel and clothing share the smallest consumptions, occupied 7% and 6%, respectively.

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Overall: T nghiĩ là band 8.0, chỉ sửa một số chỗ là:

1.Miscellaneous and socializing activities hold rather minuscule shares, constituted 18% and 11%, respectively.

-> consituting perhaps

2. The proportions of restaurant and hotel, transport and clothing are responsible for less than a fifth of all expenditures, whereas the expenses on garments and luxury diners are approximately equal with 5% and 4% each, a double is the amount spent on conveyance (9%).

-> what is "a double" (a double of what?) in this case?

3. Regarding to the given second chart, while miscellaneous experience the largest contribution with nearly a fourth of all expenses (23%),

-> "experiences"

followed by the budget spent on recreational and cultural activities (21%), the figure of food and beverage is negligible at 15%, slightly overtake the restaurant and hotel proportion (12%),

-> "higher"

however, still rank at fourth place as 16% is the share of transportation.

-> "However", "ranking"

 

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