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Topic: Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Some people who were put in jail will become normal and helpful members of society. I totally agree that students should have some conversations with these ex-prisoners to draw the perils of violating the law.

To begin with, youngsters are more likely to be persuaded by the reality of personal experiences and stories. Reformed offenders can tell teenagers about how they got involved in crime, the hazards of a criminal lifestyle and what life in prison is really like. Obviously, with the popularity of mass media, adolescents seem to imagine the glamorous lives of criminals. Thus, share of prisoners will be the best methods to dispel these ideals. Furthermore, while teenagers are often indifferent to the advice given by adults around them, stories of an ex-offender can attract their attention. The vivid and shocking series of events may have powerful impacts

Moreover, it is much less effective to provide the alternatives to educate teenagers about crime. Firstly, most of the schools invite police officers and hold some workshops, which regards as the best option. However, young people appear to consider some guidance of figures of authority as compulsory rules. Thus, this method can be useless to youngsters, except some informing students. A second choice would be for school teachers who present a boring lecture about crime. As a result, teenagers cannot understand this topic thoroughly because of theoretical and general knowledge. Finally, some documentary films are considered as a source of materials. Although it is informative, youngsters find it hard to approach this topic because of its lack of interaction.

To sum up, I fully back up the opinion that people who have a brand new life after serving a prison sentence could help to deter young people from committing crimes.

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Some people who were put in jail will become normal and helpful members of society. I totally agree that students should have some conversations with these ex-prisoners to draw the perils of violating the law.
 
To begin with, youngsters are more likely to be persuaded by the reality of personal experiences and stories. Reformed offenders can tell teenagers about how they got involved in crime, the hazards of a criminal lifestyle and what life in prison is really likely . Obviously, with the popularity of mass media, adolescents seem to imagine the glamorous lives of criminals. Thus, share of prisoners will be the best methods to dispel these ideals. Furthermore, while teenagers are often indifferent to the advice given by adults around them, stories of an ex-offender can attract their attention. The vivid and shocking series of events may have powerful impacts
 
Moreover, it is much less effective to provide the alternatives to educate teenagers about crime. Firstly, most of the schools invite police officers and hold some workshops, which regards as the best option. However, young people appear to consider some guidance of figures of authority as compulsory rules. Thus, this method can be useless to youngsters, except some informing students. A second choice would be for school teachers who present a boring lecture about crime. As a result, teenagers cannot understand this topic thoroughly because of theoretical and general knowledge. Finally, some documentary films are considered as a source of materials. Although it is informative, youngsters find it hard to approach this topic because of its lack of interaction.
 
To sum up, I fully back up the opinion that people who have a brand new life after serving a prison sentence could help to deter young people from committing crimes.
 
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