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Topic: Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the main source of news for the majority of people. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that in the future, newspapers are still the primary source of information in spite of the prevalence of online news. Nevertheless, I do not agree with this opinion for the following reasons.

To begin with, it is undeniable that reading news on the Internet is far more convenient these days. People now seem to be busy all day and therefore they often prefer using their smartphones or tablets to acquire information about daily events and news, instead of picking up a magazine at stores. Similarly important is that traditional newspapers, to some extent, fail to compete with online media in terms of immediate updates and coverage. For instance, a person would be informed of an incident by online websites within about several few minutes after it occurs, whereas it may be impossible for a news agency to bring those events to the today’s newspapers. As a result, many agencies, such as New York Times or ABC News, have witnessed drastic decreases in their operating profits and revenues over the past few years.

Another apparent reason, I believe, is the increase in popularity of social online networks, which now has become an indispensable part of many individuals’ lives. These modern source of news, without doubt, can provide a better way of informing as well as interacting with viewers. Taking Facebook as an example, the huge social network not only allows everyone to instantly share hot topics and stories, but also enables them to post their images and even “live stream” videos. These resources are evidently more realistic and appealing, and thus more likely to attract a numerous of viewers.

In conclusion, I am convinced that Internet-based media will replace traditional newspapers as the major source of information in the imminent future.

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Some people believe that in the future, newspapers are still the primary source of information in spite of the prevalence of online news. Nevertheless, I do not agree with this opinion for the following reasons.

your sentences are not wrong but I just want to change some tenses to make them more diversified.

"Nowadays, some people have believed that newspapers will be still the dominant source of information although the prevalence of online news is rapidly booming. From my perspective, this conception should be modified by the following explanations".

To begin with, it is undeniable that reading news on the Internet is far more convenient these days. it is undeniable that reading information on the Internet is far more convenient than reading newspapers. People now seem to be busy all day and therefore they often prefer using their smartphones or tablets to acquire information about daily events and news, instead of picking up a magazine newspapers and magazines at stores. Similarly important Another important reason is that traditional newspapers, to some extent, fail to compete with online media in terms of immediate updates and coverage. For instance, a person would be informed of an incident by online news websites within about several a few minutes after it occurs   the event took place,  whereas it may be impossible for a news agency to bring those events to the today’s newspapers. As a result, many agencies, such as New York Times or ABC News, have witnessed drastic decreases in their operating profits and revenues over the past few years.

Another apparent worthy reason, I believe, is the increase in popularity of social online networks, which now has become an indispensable part of many individuals’ lives. These modern source of news, without doubt, can provide a better way of informing as well as interacting with viewers. Taking Facebook as an example, the huge social network not only allows everyone to instantly share hot topics and stories, but also enables them to post their images and even “live stream” videos. These resources are evidently more realistic and appealing, and thus more likely to attract a numerous of viewers.

you are sidetracked by mentioning about social networks, because I think that this topic does not ask about social networks, just news on the Internet.

In conclusion, I am convinced that Internet-based media will replace traditional newspapers as the major source of information in the imminent future.

  Hoping that you can attain some useful comments, if having any concerns, feel free to comment again, I am willing to anwser if these questions are in my hand's control.

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your sentences are not wrong but I just want to change some tenses to make them more diversified.

"Nowadays, some people have believed that newspapers will be still the dominant source of information although the prevalence of online news is rapidly booming. From my perspective, this conception should be modified by the following explanations".

To begin with, it is undeniable that reading news on the Internet is far more convenient these daysit is undeniable that reading information on the Internet is far more convenient than reading newspapers. People now seem to be busy all day and therefore they often prefer using their smartphones or tablets to acquire information about daily events and news, instead of picking up a magazine newspapers and magazines at stores. Similarly important Another important reason is that traditional newspapers, to some extent, fail to compete with online media in terms of immediate updates and coverage. For instance, a person would be informed of an incident by online news websites within about several a few minutes after it occurs   the event took place,  whereas it may be impossible for a news agency to bring those events to the today’s newspapers. As a result, many agencies, such as New York Times or ABC News, have witnessed drastic decreases in their operating profits and revenues over the past few years.

Another apparent worthy reason, I believe, is the increase in popularity of social online networks, which now has become an indispensable part of many individuals’ lives. These modern source of news, without doubt, can provide a better way of informing as well as interacting with viewers.Taking Facebook as an example, the huge social network not only allows everyone to instantly share hot topics and stories, but also enables them to post their images and even “live stream” videos. These resources are evidently more realistic and appealing, and thus more likely to attract a numerous of viewers.

you are sidetracked by mentioning about social networks, because I think that this topic does not ask about social networks, just news on the Internet.

In conclusion, I am convinced that Internet-based media will replace traditional newspapers as the major source of information in the imminent future.

  Hoping that you can attain some useful comments, if having any concerns, feel free to comment again, I am willing to anwser if these questions are in my hand's control.

Theo bạn, bài viết này được bao nhiêu "chấm" ?
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–1 phiếu

Some people believe that in the future, newspapers are still the primary source of information in spite of the prevalence of online news. Nevertheless, I do not agree with this opinion for the following reasons.

your sentences are not wrong but I just want to change some tenses to make them more diversified.

"Nowadays, some people have believed that newspapers will be still the dominant source of information although the prevalence of online news is rapidly booming. From my perspective, this conception should be modified by the following explanations".

To begin with, it is undeniable that reading news on the Internet is far more convenient these daysit is undeniable that reading information on the Internet is far more convenient than reading newspapers. People now seem to be busy all day and therefore they often prefer using their smartphones or tablets to acquire information about daily events and news, instead of picking up a magazine newspapers and magazines at stores. Similarly important Another important reason is that traditional newspapers, to some extent, fail to compete with online media in terms of immediate updates and coverage. For instance, a person would be informed of an incident by online news websites within about several a few minutes after it occurs   the event took place,  whereas it may be impossible for a news agency to bring those events to the today’s newspapers. As a result, many agencies, such as New York Times or ABC News, have witnessed drastic decreases in their operating profits and revenues over the past few years.

Another apparent worthy reason, I believe, is the increase in popularity of social online networks, which now has become an indispensable part of many individuals’ lives. These modern source of news, without doubt, can provide a better way of informing as well as interacting with viewers.Taking Facebook as an example, the huge social network not only allows everyone to instantly share hot topics and stories, but also enables them to post their images and even “live stream” videos. These resources are evidently more realistic and appealing, and thus more likely to attract a numerous of viewers.

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