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Mong mọi người góp ý cho em bài này với ạ, em sắp thi rồi mà em đang hơi mất phương hướng :((( Em cảm ơn nhiều ạ.

Some people argue that in recent years, stars have tendency to be well-known for allure rather than how much they fulfill. While I agree with this idea , I believe that some  famous people still work hard to pursue their dream and should not be dismissed as bad example.

On the one hand, the celebrities are famous without any achievements would have negative effect on young people. Firstly, rather than focusing on work, young people tend to only care about their looking and money. They waste their time and money on taking care of beauty, even try to  show themselves to be a rich people for the purpose of being famous. When these costs outweigh the amount of money they have, some people would do anything to earn money including involving in illegal activities. Secondly, looking at easy life of singers, actors , youngsters are likely to look down on achievement other people work hard to get. That young generation would result in a future world where professional people is not respected in the right way.

On the other hand, some celebrities are successful based on their own efforts. For example, Micheal Jackson, a honored singer in every ages, even though does not have a appeal appearance and be born in a poor family, he established his career step by step, finally he became an admired pop singer around the world.  By hearing stories of these people,  most of young people would endeavor to do their best for their job. This will result in well qualified, competent and enthusiastic workforce, in turn a more productive and prosperous nation. In this case, perhaps the celebrities have a positive impact on youngsters.

In conclusion, although some celebrities may cause bad attitude of young people, we should not reject other famous people acting as a positive role models.

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