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The graph illustrates changes in the proportion of unemployment in the age group 16 to 24 year olds by the way of comparison with overall unemployment figures between 1993 and 2012 in England.

Overall, the rate of young people who were unemployed was substantially higher than the overall percentage of adults without work over a period of 20 years. In regarding to areas, unemployment figures for both categories were consistently higher in London than in the rest of England.

In 1993, the percentage of jobless  adults 16 to 24 year olds living outside the capital  was around 18%, while the proportion of English living in London  was 5% higher, at 22%. Likewise, the overall young adult unemployment rate in the capital, at 14%, was 4% higher than the figure for in the rest of England, at 10%. Over the next 10 years, although there was a declining trend in unemployed groups, levels in London were significant ly higher than in the rest of country.

From 2002 to 2012, despite fluctuation, yound joblessness in England rates grew up enormously, from 12% to 21 % in the rest of England, and the from around 15% to a peak of 25% in the capital. Conversely, the figures for adults without work both in London and outside London remained below 10%.

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The graph illustrates changes in the proportion of unemployment in the age group 16 to 24 year olds by the way of comparison with overall unemployment figures between 1993 and 2012 in England.

Overall, the rate of young people who were unemployed was substantially higher than the overall percentage of adults without work over a period of 20 years. In regarding to areas, unemployment figures for both categories were consistently higher in London than in the rest of England.

In 1993, the percentage of jobless  young adults aged from 16 to 24 year olds living outside the capital  was around 18%, while the proportion of English living in London  was 5% higher, at 22%. Likewise, the overall young adult unemployment rate in the capital, at 14%, was 4% higher than the figure for in the rest of England, at 10%. Over the next 10 years, although there was a declining trend in unemployed groups, levels in London were significant ly higher than in the rest of country.

From 2002 to 2012, despite fluctuations, young joblessness in England rates grew up enormously, from 12% to 21 % in the rest of England, and the from around 15% to a peak of 25% in the capital. Conversely, the figures for adults without work both in London and outside London remained below 10%.

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