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Task 2. Opinion essay | Crime

In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment.

To what extent do you agree?

 

Crimes is always a controversial issue. It is concerned that juvenile delinquents account for the swelling of crime in some countries. Many people claim that wrongdoers have to receive the proper punishment under any circumstances. While I agree that everyone should be put in the same league, the strict disciplining will give severe impact to children's future.

 

On the one hand, although the majority of teenagers could distinguish the divergence of right or wrong, they still have insufficient experience in their behavior and also self-control. Therefore, I believe that punishment of young people as adults could make a severe impact on their development and confidence in future.

 

Additionally, instead of thinking how to punish the youth, we should re-consider the appropriate education method from the schoolhouse, also the way family put effort on taking care of their children. Hence, anyone who is accountable for upbringing youngsters that engaged in offences should take the major responsibility for their negligence. Because of how old the children are, they consistently need instructions and guidance from adults.

 

One the other side, I also agree with the viewpoint that everyone should be treated and also punished in the same league under any circumstances. Notwithstanding, only when the youngsters are found guilty of serious offences, such as rape or murder, should they being received the similarity of punishment as adults. Because, in that moment, the ordinary parental and school discipline is advisable anymore. So, let’s the separate third party be enough determined to carry out.

 

In conclusion, although I hope that everyone should be equal in law in spite of their ages, I also believe that juvenile delinquents should have another chance for their future.

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Crimes is always a controversial issue. It is concerned that juvenile delinquents account for the swelling of crime in some countries. Many people claim that wrongdoers have to receive the proper punishment(S) under any circumstances. While I agree that everyone should be put in the same league(treatment, consideration), the(X) strict disciplining will give severe impact to children's future.

 

On the one hand, although the majority of teenagers could distinguish the divergence of right or wrong, they still have insufficient experience in their behavior(S) and also self-control. Therefore, I believe that punishment of(for) young people as adults could make a severe impact(s) on their development and confidence in future.

 

Additionally, instead of thinking how to punish the youth, we should re-consider the appropriate education method from the schoolhouse, also the way(that) family put effort on taking care of their children. Hence, anyone who is accountable for upbringing youngsters that engaged in offences should take the major responsibility for their negligence. Because of how old the children are, they consistently need instructions and guidance from adults.

 

One the other side, I also agree with the viewpoint that everyone should be treated and also punished in the same league under any circumstances. Notwithstanding, only when the youngsters are found guilty of serious offences, such as rape or murder, should they being received the similarity of punishment as adults. Because, in that moment, the ordinary parental and school discipline is advisable anymore. So, let’s the separate third party be enough determined to carry out.

 

In conclusion, although I hope that everyone should be equal in law in spite of their ages, I also believe that juvenile delinquents should have another chance for their future.

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