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Bar chart: leisure time

 

 

 

 

 

The given chart illustrates the information on how much spare time males and females of five types of employment status had in a typical week bewteen 1998 and 1999. It is evident that the unemployed and retired had more time to relax than the other type of people.

To begin, appart from employed partime and housewives status, which has no data for men, the number of free time men had is slightly taller than women did about 5 hours. The housewives had the medium amount of free time, about 60 hours.

The women who work part-time as well as full-time had the fewest numer of time off, approxiately 40 hours, compared to the 45 hours of leisure time for men. In contrast, the tallest number of  leisure time the unemployed and retired status had is approxiately as twice as the least, which goes up to about 80 hours for men and 75 hours for women.

The graph summarises that the male enjoy more leisure time than woman and employed people had less time for leisure activity than retired and unemployed people. 

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đã hỏi 10 Tháng 7, 2016 trong Chữa đề ielts hàng tuần bởi phuongganh12 (4 điểm)
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The given chart illustrates for the information on how much spare time of males and females of five types of employment status had in a typical week bewteen between 1998 and 1999. It is evident that the unemployed and retired had more time to relax than the other type of people.

To begin, appart apart from employed partime part time and housewives status, which has no data for men, the number of free time men had is slightly taller than women did about 5 hours. The housewives had the medium amount of free time, about 60 hours.

The women who work part-time as well as full-time had the fewest numer of time off, approxiately approximately 40 hours, compared to the 45 hours of leisure time for men. In contrast, the tallest number of  leisure time the unemployed and retired status had is approxiately approximately as twice as the least, which goes up to about 80 hours for men and 75 hours for women.

The graph summarises that the male enjoy more leisure time than woman and employed people had less time for leisure activity than retired and unemployed people. 

 

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đã góp ý 13 Tháng 7, 2016 bởi truclamyt (147 điểm)
Mình đươc học là sau illustrate + N thì không có for. Câu thứ 2 mình dùng cấu trúc how much N S have nên không có of. Mình sai nhiều lỗi chính tả quá. Cảm ơn bạn nhé =)))

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