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it is true that developing technology helps people can search a lot of information worldwide quickly by surfing the Internet,they can follow  news of various fields such as economic,politic,education and entertainment.However, they can not deny that newspaper still play the important role for people's life daily because of its positiveness.In my opinion , newspaper is always a vital thing help people can reach information.

On the one hand ,reading newspaper on the Internet aid people save a lot of money and time .Firstly, They can read them everywhere and wide their knowledege fast.For example, people do not have much freetime ,they must work from nine to five or even more to finish thier business perfectly so that reading newspaper is a difficult thing for them.Therefore,electric journal create many chances for people earning information in the world,they can enjoy thier meals, chat with their friends while reading newspaper which also save a lot of time for them.Secondly,people can update the newest information worldwide contansly.Daily, there are many events uploaded to the Internet ,people can use electrical devices to search information which they want on the Internet.For instance, if people is outside and want to know about "Brexit Event",they can use thier smartphone to find this which do not waste much time to go to the bookshop and buy a newspaper.

On the other hand,searching information traditionally by newspaper  is sometimes the most effective way currently.Although development of informaton technology is really strong ,it often makes people a lot of trouble.The first reason is that it can get bad influences to people 's health.It is true that working with electrical devices too much leading to many serious sicknesses.For example,if people use the computer over four hours per day,they must catch a disease about eye such as near-sighted.The second reason is reading newspaper help people actively in all of situations.People may get trouble in reading electrial journal if the wifi is broken or thier devices are out of battery.However,people can read newspaper when they really want without depending on any factors.

In conclusion,there are always two sides of reading traditionally.It can make people spend some money and time for it.However, it affects to their health seriously as electrical journal.

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This writing is good in general. It is well built by strong arguments

It is interesting that my idea is opposite the idea from this writing.

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In the era of technology, the appearance of the internet changes the habit of people for accessing the news which is from the newspaper into the online sources. Some people believe that despites the flourishing of the internet, people still use the traditional newspaper to get updated while the opponents do not support  this idea. I agree with the latter because of some reasons which will be discussed in this essay.

Firstly, the online news is more updated and easy to spread out while the newspaper is limitedly published. The strength of the internet is that it could bring the information from the whole world to your place through the computer window with the internet connection. For example, the decision of the UK for leaving the European Union was globally and immediately public after the result of citizen’s survey was announced from the Birmingham palace. This decision received a variety of reaction from the government of a number of countries and the stock market on the same day and the following day. This is impossible decades ago because of the limited of information delivery. Using newspaper takes a lot of time to print and deliver to the readers.

Secondly, online news is friendly environmental tool while the newspaper is not. In order to print the news on the paper, it requires having materials such as paper and ink. These materials are produced by destroying the nature such as cutting tree and ink industrial production. Cutting the tree for papers production causes a series of serious problems in developing countries such as deforestation and erosion. Further, ink industry catalyzes the air by polluting the air. However, articles written on the online paper can save the cost for materials. Besides, it also provides friendly interaction such as vivid video and pictures. Thus, using the power of the internet to spread the news to the readers is a good way to protect our mother nature.

Thirdly, the friendly and easy access to the internet brings the chance for a number of people sharing the same interest to communicate without the spatial and time barriers. For instance, the issue of Brexit could be easy discussed by a several economists, politicians, and citizens on the page of Economists Journal no matter where they come from and when they read the article. Those people could also express their opinion to provide the multidimensional view which the following readers could easily understand carefully.

As discussed above, the news from the online source has a lot of advantages; however, it is undeniable that there are some disadvantages needed to be fixed such as censorship. For example, because of the openness of the internet access, people could easily provide wrong information to get the benefit such as the fake prediction of the price of the stock market in the following day. Another example is that too many ideas could lead to confusion for readers.

In short, newspapers are gradually replaced by online paper because of its updated and convenience. However, it is necessary to censor the accuracy of the information which requires the high awareness of the readers as well.

 

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newspaper still plays the important role in people's life

newspaper is always a virtal tool that helps people can reach information.

reading newspaper on the Internet aid people save much more money and time. ( không nên sd a lot of )

reading newspaper is a difficult task for them

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it is true that recent groundbreakings of advanced technology keeps people well-informed by surfing the Internet. However, it is undeniable that newspaper still play an important role in people's daily life. In my  opinion , newspaper is always a vital information channel due to its own conveniences.
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