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The Internet is a global information system. Nowadays, in the information age, the Internet plays a more and more important role in human being lives. However, whether the Internet is a really indispensable tool or completely brings about many advantages for people has caused heated debate. In my view, the internet is popular everywhere in the world and global information system. The Internet provides many useful utilities for users but besides that it also has negative. The internet to bring us so much advantage but it also has the disadvantage of it. So I agree with this statement.

Firstly, the Internet is a big store of information. Any kind of information on any topic is available on the Internet. You can find it by the most popular search engines. Beside, you can share information with other people around the world. The Internet has made it easy for people to communicate with others because it is cheap and convenient. The only costs incurred are those paid to the Internet service provider. People are able to share their thoughts and views on matters affecting the globe. The Internet acts as common global platform where people explore ideologies and cultures without limitation. And you can share all your documents to your friends and sharing information very fast and safely. This is one of the major reasons why many people enjoy surfing the Internet. You can watch movies, listen to music, read your favorite books and play games in the Internet. The Internet has become a place to entertainment. Nowadays, it is possible to carry out financial on the Internet. You can pay funds or taxes and utility bills or book movie tickets over the Internet in your office or home. The growth of e-commerce has made it possible for people to online shopping. They can sell consumer goods. But everything has its disadvantages. Spam email is the sending of unwanted and useless emails to random people. These emails obstruct the recipient needlessly. They are used to bombard your inbox with advertisements. This is quite perplexing as it always gets mixed up with important emails. The next drawback is accuracy of information. Some information may be incorrect. Sometimes you may be confused. A lot of time is wasted to collect the information on the Internet. Some people waste a lot of time in chatting or to play games. At home or offices, many people use the Internet without any accurate purpose. Next are malicious programs in the Internet. They attack a computer with the sole intent of causing harm. They can make the computer malfunction or you lose important data. Worse yet is the fact that you can easily become victim to malicious software by clicking on a link on the Internet. You can protect yourself by installing a reliable anti-virus program on your computer before accessing the Internet.

Finally, there are many advantages and disadvantages of the Internet. Depend on you, it will be the advantages or disadvantage. You should balance your time to study and entertainment. And know always remember the Internet is the tools you need to use. It is not the thing control you. Please remember in your head make your life better and do not let it bad.

 
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Chào bạn, mình đã xem qua bài viết của bạn rồi. Nó thật sự là một bài viết rất hay. Nhưng trong những cái hay đó, mình lại có một số góp ý nho nhỏ thôi. Nó chỉ trong phạm vi quan điểm của mình và cũng như câu nói: No one is perfect có thể mình sẽ sai và nếu có gì bạn nhớ bỏ qua và nhắn tin lại cho mình nhé. Cám ơn nhiều. Love!

 

Brings about many advantages--------> brings (he,she,it,us,.....) many advantages.

 

The Internet provides many useful utilities for users but besides that it also has negative

--> Chỗ này mình nghĩ là bạn nên dùng some harmful things

And you can share all your documents to your friends and sharing information very fast and safely.---> chỗ này mình cũng chẳng hiểu sâu lắm nhưng mình có thể sửa cho bạn là

1And you can share all your documents to your friends and sharing information is very fast and safe.( việc chia sẻ thông tin thì rất nhanh và an toàn)

2. And you can share all your documents to your friends and also can share information in a very fast and safe way.

3. And you can share all your documents and share information which is very fast and safe.

The Internet has become a place to entertainment( chỗ này có một lỗi sai về word form)

 1. The Internet has become a place for entertainment

2. The Internet has become a place to entertain.

Nowadays, it is possible to carry out financial on the Internet.

Chỗ này phải dùng trạng từ bạn ơi ( financially)

Depend on you ( cái này thì mình hong biết nữa nhưng mình nghĩ nên dùng depending on you)

You should balance your time to study and entertainment

Entertainment sai vì chỗ này ta phải dùng động từ là entertain chứ không phải entertainment là danh từ nhé.

And know always remember the Internet is the tools

the tools ----> the tool bạn nhé còn vì sao thì bạn biết rồi

Please remember in your head make your life better and do not let it bad.

Remember + O1+ to+....

Do not let it bad------> do not let it to be bad ( bad là tính từ mà bạn)

 

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