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My name is L, a student of sixteen at K High School. I am living with my parents in H. If you see me, you can be impressed by my apperance with a round face. In spite of being nomally tallness, i have a fit body. Specially, I have long black hair. Because of being short sighted, I usually wear glasses , so my friends call me "professor". However,  I am very sociable. I am interested in joining social activities. I also invite my friend to take part in charity activities. In addition, iI like hanging out with my friends. Therefore, we can understand each other. Iam said to be a industrious and mature person. At school, I always pay attention to my teacher's lessons and finich all my exercise off the deadline. Beside, I also find valuable information in the internet, on the radio, etc  to broad my knowledge. I help my parents what I can do if I have finished my homework at home. In my future, I want to become a teacher to teach the children who are in remote areas. I try to make myself discipline to improve and become a useful person for society.
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I think that you should change tallness to mayble height

an industrious not a

this passage is very nice and interesting

but if you want to achieve high score in IELTS you must use more exciting words and your passage hasn't got enough words I guess. And try to be more careful with your little mistakes like a/an or grammars like

I can help my parents the things that I can do It's much better

One more you couldn't say that only 1 word proffessor but also a professor

Dictation: finish not finich

Uhm in gnerally your passage is not really perfect but if you are 12 i can say that it's very good but now you are 16 so you need to improve more. There is something wrong with your passage. Check it again and you'll see
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My name is L, a student of sixteen sixteen-student at K High School. I am living with my parents in H. If you see me, you can be impressed by my apperance with a round face. In spite of being nomally tallness tall normally, i have a fit body. Specially, I have long black hair. Because of being short sighted, I usually wear glasses , so my friends call me "professor". However,  I am very sociable. I am interested in joining social activities. I also invite my friend to take part in charity activities. In addition, iI like hanging out with my friends. Therefore, we can understand each other. I am said want to be a industrious and mature person. At school, I always pay attention to my teacher's lessons and finich(?) all my exercise off the deadline. Beside, I also find valuable information in the internet, on the radio, etc  to broad (widen) my knowledge. I help my parents what I can do if I have finished my homework at home. In my future, I want to become a teacher to teach the children who are in remote areas. I try to make myself discipline to improve and improve myself to become a useful person for society

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