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Among all way to a healthy good. I think the first, you should proper diet. Breafast is a important so, it provides energy to the body to work a day. You can drink a glass of lemon juice in the morning. In order to vitamins C supplements for the body. In addition, you should drink much water, eat fruit to beautiful skin. In each mean, you should full eat nutrients such as: fat, mineral, vitamins, starch, protein. Dinner, you much restrict fats and starch, but it is also important to remember that fat is a necessary part of our diet and what matter most is the type of fat we eat foods. You should more relax, go to bed earler. Besides, you are often do exercise to healthy good, prevent disease, improve memory.
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Have a good health, a mind, and full of energy for the activities of daily living. First; you should have a correct diet. Breakfast is an important so, it provides energy to the body to work a day. You can drink a glass of lemon juice in the morning. Vitamin's C supplements for the body. In addition, you should drink much water, eat fruit to beautiful skin. In each mean, you should be full eat nutrients such as fat, mineral, vitamins, starch, protein. Dinner, you much restrict fats and starch, but it is also important to remember that fat is a necessary part of our diet and what matter most is the type of fat we eat foods. You should more relax, go to bed earlier. Besides, you often do exercise to be healthy good, prevent disease, improve memory.   
 
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Breafast is a important so, it provides energy to the body to work a day.
In order to vitamins C supplements for the body.( in order to + V chứ ko phải + N) => in order to supply vitamín c fỏ the body
In addition, you should drink much water, eat fruit to have beautiful skin.
You should  relax more and, go to bed earlier.
you are have to do exercise to have healthy good body, prevent disease, improve memory.
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