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Since the beginning of the 21st century,we have literally seen many technological advancements in which many great inventions are being brought to human beings.There is no denying fact that these inventions have played an important role in our daily lives and brought us more benefits in ever before. However,I personally want to see a device called as "rubbish collecting" machine in the future and I also believe that this is the necessary tool that we are lacking.

 As you can see today,environmental pollution is becoming a big issue in many places around the world and being a headline in every magazine,newspaper or television broadcast,..It is true that this problem is mainly caused by human's activities and that many rubbish and wastes are  eliminated into the environment.So many are these trash nowadays that they can not be cleaned and collected at all.People continue to pollute their surroundings and do not care for the future that is predicted to threaten to their life.As a result,many natural places which used to be beautiful have been turned into the garbage dump.

With all the reasons above,I strongly recommend creating a " rubbish-collecting" machine so that it pick up and gather the huge amount of trash that human can not have enough capacity to do.This machine must be able to all the trashes left in any polluted or public places like beaches,parks,etc..Wherever it goes,the collecting part of the machine must pick up any trash directed along the way and return to the requested site after the work is finished.As this is an automatic machine and not be controlled completely by humans,we must set the time for its operation and the place where trash is recycled and get done.This must be a big-size machine and can operate with great productivity a day.I am sure that once introduced and used by the public,the "rubbish-collecting" machine will become a wonderful invention contributing beneficially to mankind.

To sum up,no other inventions rather than the "rubbish- collecting" machine do I want to observe in my life.Whatever this can be,the machine will help reduce the environmental pollution and be a useful tool for our life.We should start making this machine as soon as possible before the earth is completely destroyed by us.Let's start right now before it is too late.

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Since the beginning of the 21st century,we have literally seen (minh nghi witnessed thi hay hon) many technological advancements in which many great inventions are being brought to human beings.There is no denying fact that these inventions have played an important role in our daily lives and brought us more benefits in (minh nghi ko co in) ever before.However,I personally see desire hoac tu formal honto see a device called us called "rubbish collecting" machine in the future and I also believe that this is the necessary tool that we are lacking.

 As you can see today,environmental pollution is becoming a big issue in many places around the world and being a headline in every magazine,newspaper or television broadcast,..It is true that this problem is mainly caused has been mainly caused by human's activities and that many rubbish and wastes are  eliminated released into the environment.So many are these trash nowadays that they can not be cleaned and collected at all.People continue to pollute their surroundings and do not care for the future that is predicted to threaten to their life.As a result,many natural places which used to be beautiful have been turned into the garbage dump.

With all the reasons above,I strongly recommend creating a " rubbish-collecting" machine so that it will pick up and gather the huge amount of trash that human can not have enough capacity to do recycle .This machine must be able to all the trashes left in any polluted or public places like beaches,parks,etc..Wherever it goes,the collecting part of the machine must pick up any trash directed littered directly along the way and return to the requested site after the work is finished.As this is an automatic machine and not be controlled completely by humans,we must set the time for its operation and the place where trash is recycled and get done.This must be a big-size machine and can operate with great productivity a day.I am sure that once introduced and used by the public,the "rubbish-collecting" machine will become a wonderful invention contributing beneficially to mankind.

To sum up,no other inventions rather than the "rubbish- collecting" machine do I want to observe in my life.Whatever this can be,the machine will help reduce the environmental pollution and be a useful tool for our life.We should start making this machine as soon as possible before the earth is completely destroyed by us.Let's start right now before it is too late.

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Since the beginning of the 21st century,we have literally seen many technological advancements in which many have brought an array of great inventions are being brought to human beings.There is no denying fact that these inventions have played an important role in our daily lives and brought us more benefits in than ever before.However,I Personally want to, I am expecting a device called as "rubbish collecting" machine in the future, and I also believe it is my belief that this is the necessary tool that we are lacking.

 As you can see today,environmental pollution is becoming a big global issue in many places around the world and being the headline of every magazine,newspaper or television broadcast,..It is true that this problem is mainly caused by human's activities and that many rubbish and wastes are  eliminated into the environment inappropriate waste management.So many are these much is the refuse disposal nowadays that they can not be cleaned and collected at all it makes cleaning more and more difficult.People continue to pollute their surroundings and do not care for the future that is predicted to threaten to their life.As a result,many natural places which used to be beautiful have been turned into the garbage dump.

With all the reasons above,I strongly recommend creating a " rubbish-collecting" machine so that it pick up and gather the huge amount of trash with extreme efficiency that human can not have enough capacity to do.This machine must be able to all the trashes left put in every polluted or public places like beaches,parks,etc..Wherever it goes,the collecting part of the machine must The idea is that it will be programed to pick up any trash directed along the way wherever it goes and then returns to the requested site after finishing.As this is an automatic machine and not be controlled completely by humans under complete human's control,we must set the time for its operation and the place where trash is recycled and get done.This must be a big-size machine and can operate with great productivity a day.I am sure that once introduced and used by the public,the "rubbish-collecting" machine will become a wonderful invention contributing beneficially to mankind.

To sum up,no other inventions rather than the "rubbish- collecting" machine do I want to observe have in my life.Whatever this can be,the machine will help reduce the environmental pollution and be a useful tool for our life.We should start making this machine as soon as possible before the earth is completely destroyed by us.Let's start right now before it is too late.

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