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It is no denied that making time for exercise provides some important benefits. First of all, doing exercise improves your physical health. Exercising help controls your weight, developing and maintaining physical fitness  as well as prevent osteoporosis, high blood pressure, heart disease, cancer,etc. Besides, exercise improves mental health. Not only does it reduce anxiety and stress, doing exercise also promote your mood and lowers your risk of other mental health conditions such as depression. Last but not least, doing exercise every day help you keep the brain healthy. Physical activities help increase blood circulation, promote better sleep, relieve stress, boost memory and ability to learn new things. To sum up, regular exercise and physical activity is an important part of a healthy lifestyle, whose health benefits are hard to ignore.

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It is no denied (undeniable) that making time for exerciseprovides some important benefits. First of all, doing exercise improves your physical health. Exercising help controls your weight, developing and maintaining physical fitness  as well as prevent osteoporosis, high blood pressure, heart disease, cancer,etc. Besides, exercise improves mental health. Not only does it reduce anxiety and stress, doing exercise also promotes your mood (boost your mood) and lowers your risk of other mental health conditions such as depression. Last but not least, doing exercise every day help you keep the brain healthy. Physical activities help increase blood circulation, promote better sleep, relieve stress, boost memory and ability to learn new things. To sum up, regular exercise and physical activity is an important part of a healthy lifestyle, whose health benefits are hard to ignore.

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It is undeniable / There is no doubt that making time for exercise provides/ brings/ renders some important/ vital advantages/ merits ( you should use synonym) . First of all, doing exercise improves your physical health. Exercising help you control your weight, thus developing and maintaining physical fitness or prevent osteoporosis, high blood pressure, heart disease, cancer, etc into the bargain. Another equally significant element is that doing exercise enhances mental health. Not only can physical activities reduce anxiety and stress, but they also promote/ boost your mood and diminish risk of other mental health conditions such as depression. Last but not least, doing exercise regularly keeps the brain healthy through  increasing blood circulation, bettering sleep, relieving stress and boosting memory and ability to learn new things. To sum up, regular exercise and physical activity is an important part of a healthy lifestyle, whose health benefits are hard to ignore.

 

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It is no denied (denying) that making time for exercise (exercises) provides some important benefits. First of all, doing exercise improves your physical health. Exercising help controls (helps control) your weight, developing and maintaining physical fitness  as well as prevent osteoporosis, high blood pressure, heart disease, cancer,etc. Besides, exercise improves mental health. Not only does it reduce anxiety and stress, doing exercise also promote (pomotes) your mood and lowers your risk of other mental health conditions such as depression. Last but not least, doing exercise every day help you keep the brain healthy. Physical activities help increase blood circulation, promote better sleep, relieve stress, boost memory and ability to learn new things. To sum up, regular exercise and physical activity is an important part of a healthy lifestyle, whose health benefits are hard to ignore.

 

 

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