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In the resent years, moral education for kids has become the issue in general public. While some maintain that parents should teach children how to be good members of society, others reject this notion, believing that school is the better place to learn this. Discussed below are several factors that stark contrast between these two perspectives.

One of benefits associated with rising value of kids at home is the opportunity of helping all of members in family being closer and understanding each other. Some opponent of this position argue that parents often do not have enough time and patient to teaching kids in long period time, during in school, teachers have all of these factors to raise kids.

The stereotype has blinded people to fact that experiences of children spending with parents impact significantly to their character and their views of life. Children are tend to replicate adult’s action, all of behaviors of parents in social life be catched by kids. From there, parents teach their own kids by good behaviors performance. Additionally, the family love is one of important keys to raising children with great value, that mean teaching kid at home is the good way to show their love, to understanding and to help all of member in family get on well.

Although it could be paid off in many dimensions, it is to bring problem. Given parents lack of skills and experiences to teaching kids, they can negative influence to kids. For instance, when a kid make a mistake, dad or mom often complaint instead of listening to him, it can make he feel bad and think negatively. Besides, Moral education method in school is refined particularly, all of teachers be trained how to teach children well.  Anecdotal evidence show that children during ages 2 to 6 years going to nurse school have more confident and polite than others. It is could be taken as a particularly salient example of this.

The facts present above have created a dilemma when teaching children. Whilst it is still an intense debate, individuals should have further consideration on this. However, As far as I am concern,  its gains far outweigh its drawbacks in many dimensions.
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In the resent years, moral education for kids has become the issue in general public. While some maintain that parents should teach children how to be good members of society, others reject this notion, believing that school is the better place to learn this. Discussed below are several factors that stark contrast between these two perspectives.

One of benefits associated with rising value of kids at home is the opportunity of helping all of members in family being closer and understanding each other. Some opponent of this position argue that parents often do not have enough time and patient to teaching kids in long period time, during in school, teachers have all of these factors to raise kids. ( expand) - ý này hơi dài dòng.

The stereotype has blinded people to fact that experiences of children spending with parents impact significantly to their character and their views of life. Children are tend to replicate adult’s action, all of behaviors of parents in social life be catched by kids. From there, parents teach their own kids by good behaviors performance. Additionally, the family love is one of important keys to raising children with great value, that mean teaching kid at home is the good way to show their love, to understanding and to help all of member in family get on well. ( check grammar)

Although it could be paid off in many dimensions, it is to bring problem. Given parents lack of skills and experiences to teaching kids, they can negative influence to kids. For instance, when a kid make a mistake, dad or mom often complaint instead of listening to him, it can make he feel bad and think negatively. Besides, Moral education method in school is refined particularly, all of teachers be trained how to teach children well.  Anecdotal evidence show that children during ages 2 to 6 years going to nurse school have more confident and polite than others. It is could be taken as a particularly salient example of this.

The facts present above have created a dilemma when teaching children. Whilst it is still an intense debate, individuals should have further consideration on this. However, As far as I am concern,  its gains far outweigh its drawbacks in many dimensions.

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