Writing task 2: Life now is better than it was 100 years ago.
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     Life is changing every second and getting better is life' target. We all can see that now, life has higher quality than it was a century ago. In this essay, I am going to examine this statement from both points of view.

    To begin with, life gets better means that people live in higher condition, especially woman and children. For instance, woman now have the right in society, stand for election and also be respected in the family. Futhermore, an advanced in communication technology make it easier to be in contact with collegues, personal friends and relatives everywhere. From a societal perspective, development is life's objective, similar to getting better. The economy is grown raises the national's income and the ability to export goods.

     The advance of technology is helpful in our daily life. In addition, technology grown symbolized for the development of the country. On the other hand, technology in nowaday makes families breaking up, people tend to use devices than actual face to face personal relationships. Teenagers, for example are already be a social media addicted, always keep eyes to the smartphone or electronic devices and do not interesting in anything else.

     In conclusion, it's true to say that life is better than it was. Better means change. Life has to change if it wants to develope. But, our emotionallife has been suffered. So, this is a challenge for people who live in a twenty-first century.

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Dear,

I like your ideas but I think that you should develop your sentence for more full meaning. You may wrote this essay under time pressure, your sentence is so short, simple and your ideas are not well-orangize.

Here is my comments. Hope that you find it useful. Tks

Life is changing every second and getting better is life' target => in notion of living standard. We all can see that now => deleted, life has =>people now have higher quality than it was =>they did a century ago. In this essay, I am going to examine this statement from both points of view.

    To begin with, life gets better means that people live in higher condition, especially woman and children  => the social equality is significantly improved compared with it was in the past. For instance, woman now have the right in society, stand for election and also be respected in the family => For instance, women now have more powerful voice in both family and society; they have right to make important decisions or take part in many community’s activities such as voting for the election. Futhermore, an advanced in communication technology make it easier to be in contact with collegues, personal friends and relatives everywhere. From a societal perspective, development is life's objective, similar to getting better. The economy is grown raises the national's income and the ability to export goods. => the fast development of communication technology is also make an advancement in modern society. The variety of communication means, help to connect people around the world and foster the commercial exchanges amongst different nations.

     However, despite the advantages which morden life is bringing to people, it has the downsides to some extents. The advance of technology is helpful in our daily life. In addition, technology grown symbolized for the development of the country. On the other hand, technology in nowaday makes families breaking up, people tend to use devices than actual face to face personal relationships. Teenagers, for example are already be a social media addicted, always keep eyes to the smartphone or electronic devices and do not interesting in anything else. =>Due to the over-reliance of man on high-tech equippments, the core values of tradition which have been existed for years in many communities are gradually deteriorating. For example, visiting the elderly in family was ever a good tradition of Vietnam on special occation like New Year, the young now tend to talk with their relatives via phone rather than meet them personally. The enviroment pollution is another high cost to which human has to pay. While the widely growth of factories everywhere can create the jobs and benefit billions people in the world, the huge gas emission from them is posing an alarming issue which requires the rapid actions from us to resolve.

     In conclusion, it's true to say that life is better than it was. Better means change. Life has to change if it wants to develope. But, our emotionallife has been suffered. So, this is a challenge for people who live in a twenty-first century. => for recent century, life has been changing with both positive and negative consequences. The human in existing society can not be only benefited from the advance changing but also face with many potential dangers.

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Thank you for your comment. :))) Now I think I have better ideas and I will improve it in  my next essay. Thank you very much.
1. nên viết women hơn là woman.

2. an advanced là adj mà, đâu phải noun mà là " advanced" được

3. it's true to say.....: văn viết không được viết tắt.

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