Task 2.topic:successfull sports professionals can earn more money than people in other important professions. some people think this is unfair while other think it is justified. Discuss and opinion
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the issue of the successful sports professionals can earn more money than people in other important professions remain controversial. while some people say that it is fully fair, other people think this is unfair. i partially agree with idea that it is unfair for the people have other important professions.

On the one hand, for these who advocate the opinion of the successful sports professionals can earn more money than people who have other important careers is unfair should have their argument justified. they point to the fact that there are important careers should have wage higher. For example, the professions such as police, doctor, etc.. usually dangerous. Furthermore, the fact worth mentioning here is that some people have jobs such as economic professionals, industry professionals... who can develop country need pay salary higher and the government should create study conditions them

on the other hand, might argue that some sport professionals should be pay to wage more money. because, the health of people always are problems of sport player and athletes. the sports professionals will check the health of athletes and help them have health more great who really important with the player and the athletes. Beside, the sports such as football, tennis,... earn more money than the difference sports, so, the sports professionals of football or tennis usually have salary higher.

in conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against that some people think successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important careers which is fully justified with them, but i believe that this is unfair with the people work other important professions

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the issue of the successful sports professionals can earn more money than people in other important professions remain controversial. while some people say that it is fully fair, other people think this is unfair. i partially agree with idea that it is unfair for the people have other important professions. ( Lập từ People, professions, unfair) (Đề tránh lập từ có thể đổi câu này lại như sau) (As far as i am concerned, i am in favor of the the first/ the latter viewpoint/ I am not totally agree both of viewpoints and the reasons will be given out in this essay.)

On the one hand, for these who advocate the opinion of the successful sports professionals can (able to)  earn more money than people who have other important careers is unfair should have their argument justified. they point to the fact that there are important (vital)careers, which should have (own) wage higher. For example, the professions such as police, doctor, etc.. usually dangerous ( Câu này bi cụt nghĩa, bạn nên dùng mệnh đề để nối 2 câu lại với nhau)  Furthermore, the fact worth mentioning here is that some people have jobs such as economic professionals, industry professionals... (trong 1 đoạn văn không thể nào lập lại such as liên tục dc, chưa kể là liệt kê ở câu trên có rồi), who can develop country need pay salary higher and the government should create study conditions them.
>>> (vd: They point to the fact that there are vital occupations, which is necessary for society such as police, doctor, IT engineer, should own higher wages than athletes. 

on the other hand, might argue that some sport professionals should be pay(passive voice) to wage more money. because, the health of people  health always are is problems of  with sport player and athletes. the sports professionals will check the health of athletes and help them have health more great who really important with the player and the athletes. Beside, the sports such as football, tennis,... earn more money than the difference sports, so, the sports professionals of football or tennis usually have salary higher.

in conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against that some people think successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important careers which is fully justified with them, but i believe that this is unfair with the people work other important professions

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The issue of the successful sports professionals can earn more money than people in other important professions remain controversial. while some people say that it is fully fair, other people think this is unfair. I partially agree with idea that it is unfair for the people to have other important professions.

On the one hand, for those who advocate the opinion of the successful sports professionals can earn more money than people who have other important careers is unfair should have their argument justified. they point to the fact that there are important careers should have wage higher. For example, the professions such as police, doctor, etc.. usually dangerous. Furthermore, the fact worth mentioning here is that some people have jobs such as economic professionals, industry professionals... who can develop country need pay salary higher and the government should create study conditions them

On the other hand, might argue that some sports professionals should be pay to wage more money. because (no comma ",") the health of people always is problems of sports player and athletes. the sports professionals will check the health of athletes and help them have health more great who really important with the player and the athletes. Besides, the sports such as football, tennis,... earn more money than the difference sports, so, the sports professionals of football or tennis usually have salary higher.

in conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against that some people think successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important careers which is fully justified with them, but I believe that this is unfair with the people work other important professions

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because, the health of people always are problems of sport player and athletes.

--> Câu này lập luận chưa thuyết phục bởi vì ngành nghề nào chẳng cần có sức khỏe.

the sports such as football, tennis,... earn more money than the difference sports, so, the sports professionals of football or tennis usually have salary higher.--> why?

- Nên tập đi vào phần: Giá trị mà các ngành nghề kiến tạo cho xã hội và sự đánh đổi của các vận động viên đối với nghề nghiệp của họ.
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Task 2.topic:successfull sports professionals can earn more money than people in other important professions. some people think this is unfair while other think it is justified. Discuss and opinion

 
the issue of the successful sports professionals can earn more money than people in other important professions remain controversial. while some people  someone say that it is fully fair,  but others have opposite view . i partially agree with both ideas which present detail  at below that it is unfair for the people have other important professions.

On the one hand, for these people who advocate the opinion of the successful sports professionals can earn more money than people who have other important careers is unfair should have their argument justified. they point to the fact that there are important careers should have higher wage wage higher. Because they contribue a lot to sociaty .For example, doctor, police, engineer, scientist they work realy hard on things to improve standard of lives, environment.   the professions such as police, doctor, etc.. usually dangerous. Furthermore, the fact worth mentioning here is that some people have jobs such as economic professionals, industry professionals... who can develop country need pay salary higher and the government should create study conditions them

on On the other hand,there is a argument  might argue that some sport professionals should be paid higher salary pay to wage more money. because Because the health of sport profesionals are risking almost moment at match or traning seasons. other cause profesinals attract a lot of audiences, they help people amuse after hard working. Residents in western cities such as Real madrid, Chelsea, Manchester. They always look forward at weekend to watch foolball match. It means professional play a main role to make money for companies, organizations,club.   alway the health of people always are problems of sport player and athletes. the sports professionals will check the health of athletes and help them have health more great who really important with the player and the athletes. Beside, the sports such as football, tennis,... earn more money than the difference sports, so, the sports professionals of football or tennis usually have salary higher. (The sentence does not support any reason or relative to)

in In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against that some people think successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important careers which is fully justified with them, but i believe that this is unfair with the people work other important professions
 

 

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