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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant: 

 

A glance at the graph and table provided reveals the amount of water used around the world and water consumption in two different countries. 

On the whole, from 1900 to 2000, the quantity of water for each sector increasing gradually according to the graph and water consumption in Brazil was higher than in Democratic Republic of Congo. It is clear that the use of water for agriculture was the largest compared to the two others, which increased to 3000 km3 in 2000. Water consumption only rose steadily from the middle year of 1950 to 2000 with 1000 km3 for industrial use and 300 km3 for domestic use respectively. In general, both far below the quantity of water ultilized for agriculture thoughout a century. 

The table below illustrated water consumption in Brazil for irrigated land was at 26,500 km2 while only with 100 km2 in Congo. This is reflected that in the figures for water consumption per person with 359 m3 in Brazil and just 8 m3 in Congo. With the population of 176 million in Brazil, it shows that the large quantity water which was used in Brazil for land and per person outnumbered ones in Congo. 

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Chào bạn, mình có một số chia sẻ với bạn như sau:

1. Introduction: không dùng glance at (trong Write Right thì nói dùng từ này sẽ được điểm cao, nhưng thầy Simon khuyên ko nên dùng vì nghe rất lạ tai đối với native speaker).

2. Graph and table có thể gộp chung là charts.

3. "increasing gradually": mình ko hiểu lý do bạn dùng V.ing ở đây, và ở đây theo mình là tăng nhanh chứ ko tăng từ từ: nên có thể viết lại: increased dramatically

4. according to the graph có thể lược bỏ vì người ta đã hiểu ngầm

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