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There is a growing number of male taking on domestic responsibilities while their wives go out to work. There are several reasons involved this tendency and I strongly believe this is a positive trend.

The alternatives in the role of men and women in a family could be resulted from some factors following. Firstly, thanks to some right movements in the past, women today have more opportunities to access education than before. While hundreds years ago, girls are supposed to be at home to learn some skills such as cooking, sewing, cleaning as a preparation for their future marriage, now most girls are encouraged to go to school and pursuit higher education. Hence, women are able to develop their own career to earn money; so this is understandable for women to be breadwinners in families. Secondly, the society in 21 century is more open-minded to accept this changing role than before. Traditionally, the old say that: “ men build the house and women make it home”, which indicate that domestic responsibilities belong to women. However, today men also know how to cook well, take care of children and do household chores for their wives. There are also new kinds of jobs for male to make end meet such as nannies or babysitters.

In my point of view, this changing role in family is a significant development that can helps women have a better status in family and society. It’s apparent that becoming a breadwinner enables women to manage and control family’s finance by herself. Therefore, their husband cannot underestimate them as before, when they are at home and depend on husbands’s salary. Society also recognizes the important role of women, as they are able to work effectively and contribute to the economic growth.

In conclusion, with more chances to access education and the acceptance of society, there are more female breadwinners and house-husband in families. In the controversy whether this trend is good or bad, I strongly believe that this is a positive development.
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The alternatives in the role of men and women in a family could be resulted from some factors following

câu này viết theo active voice thay vì passive voice :p "be resulted from" phải là "result from"

Hundreds years phải đổi là hundreds OF years

pursuit phải là pursue, vì pursuit là danh từ :p

"the role in family" - thiếu mạo từ a/the, hoặc ko dùng mạo từ thì dùng số nhiều

can helps -> can help

husbands's salary -> husbands' salary :p số nhiều rồi thì ko thêm 's' sau dấu phẩy nữa

society thiếu mạo từ :p nên là the society
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