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Topic: Some people believe that the media like the press, television and the Internet should be more strictly controlled. Are you for or against this view? Write about 250 words to explain your idea.

 

In recent years, the world has seen a considerable rise in the number of people having access to the media including newspaper, television or the World Wide Web. The issue of whether these means of communication should be strictly controlled or not remains a controversial topic. In my opinion, that trying to gain control of these medias is unrealistic and not necessary.

First of all, in a modern society, where a click could make an article published to millions of readers at ease, it would be impossible to control the content which is included in the media. To be more specific, tabloids and invalid websites containing inappropriate information are in use underground; therefore, the likelihood of controlling these is almost non-existent. Moreover, once the irrelevant information is spread worldwide on the Internet, hardly can we take it back because people will continuously share it without any interfere.

Second, it should be clarified that the more we ban something, the more it would develop. Particularly, when it comes to the mass media, banning a source of information means that there would be more curious people wishing to explore it. For example, while we have policies against publishing inappropriate contents online, internet users are likely to break the rule, creating a real chaos on threads and forums online. They are increasingly likely to search for irrelevant pictures or videos, which will then be used to disturb other users.

Third, the opponent of this essay may claim that children using these medias would be seriously affected if there were no stricter controlment. However, nothing could be further than the truth is that youngsters these days have access to these contents much sooner than we think. Whether it is via the media or conversations during their life, the young nowadays have exposure to sensitive topics on the Internet, TV or magazines approximately at the age of 9 or 10. This has proven that, in fact, stricter controllment does not guarantee to protect children from inappropriate contents.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that the mass media should not and cannot be more strictly controlled.

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In recent years, the world has seen a considerable rise in the number of people having access to the media including newspaper, television or the World Wide Web. The issue of whether these means of communication should be strictly controlled or not remains a controversial topic. In my opinion, trying to gain control of these medias is unrealistic and unnecessary.

First of all, in a modern society where a click could make an article published to millions of readers at ease, it would be impossible to control the content which is included in the media. To be more specific, tabloids and invalid websites containing inappropriate information are in use underground; therefore, the likelihood of controlling these is almost non-existent. Moreover, once false information is spread worldwide on the Internet, hardly can we take it back because people will continuously share it without any interference.

Second, it is apparent (should be clarified = nên được làm sáng tỏ) that the more we ban something, the more it would develop. Particularly, when it comes to the mass media, banning a source of information means that there would be more curious people wishing to explore it. For example, while we have policies against publishing inappropriate contents online, internet users are likely to break the rules, creating real chaos (Uncountable) on threads and forums online. They are more likely to search for indecorous (irrelevant không phù hợp lắm) pictures or videos, which will then be used to disturb other users.

Third, opponents of this essay may claim that children using these medias would be seriously affected if there were no stricter controlment. However, (nothing could be further from the truth dùng khi bạn muốn nói điều được nhắc đến sai) the truth is that youngsters these days have access to these contents much sooner than we think. Whether it is via the media or conversations during their lives, the young nowadays have exposure to sensitive topics on the Internet, TV or magazines approximately at the age of 9 or 10. This has proven that, in fact, stricter controllment does not guarantee to protect children from inappropriate contents.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that the mass media should not and cannot be more strictly controlled.

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Good overall. Ideas well-developed though you should notice more about vocabulary and way to improve your conclusion. Keep up!

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In recent years, the world has seen a considerable rise in the number of people having access to the media including newspaper, television or the World Wide Web. The issue of whether these means of communication should be strictly controlled or not remains a controversial topic. In my opinion, that trying to gain control of these medias is unrealistic and unnecessary.

First of all, in a modern society, where a click could make an article published to millions of readers at ease, it would be impossible to control the content which is included in the media. To be more specific, tabloids and invalid websites containing inappropriate information are in use underground; therefore, the likelihood of controlling these is almost non-existent. Moreover, once the irrelevant information is spread worldwide on the Internet, hardly can we take it back because people will continuously share it without any interfere.

Second, it should be clarified that the more we ban something, the more it would develop. Particularly, when it comes to the mass media, banning a source of information means that there would be more curious people wishing to explore it. For example, while we have policies against publishing inappropriate contents online, internet users are likely to break the rule, creating a real chaos on threads and forums online. They are increasingly likely to search for irrelevant pictures or videos, which will then be used to disturb other users.

Third, the opponent of this essay may claim that children using these medias would be seriously affected if there were no stricter controlment. However, nothing could be further than the truth is that youngsters these days have access to these contents much sooner than we think. Whether it is via the media or conversations during their life, the young nowadays have exposure to sensitive topics on the Internet, TV or magazines approximately at the age of 9 or 10. This has proven that, in fact, stricter controllment does not guarantee to protect children from inappropriate contents.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that the mass media should not and cannot be more strictly controlled.

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