The bar chart finely depicts (represents) the proportion of travelers using 4 means of transportation in 3 different years: 1960, 1980, and 2000 in one( a specific ) European city. From an overall perspective (In general), while there were fewer people travelling to work by bike or on foot, cars were gaining in popularity.
To begin with ( khỏi cần cũng được), in 1960, cars were the least popular form of transport, with only 7% of the population drove them to work. In contrast, approximately one third of the city dwellers arrived at work on foot. The proportion of those who used bus and bikes were 20% and 27%, respectively.
It can also be observed that the number of (cars drivers)? had outstripped those of the reaming? three categories, due to a prominent increase to 37% between 1980 and 2000. In terms of buses which were the most prevalent mode of transport in 1980, its percentage had dropped to only 18%. Bikers demonstrated the most dramatic decrease as it plunged by a massive 15%, compared to an 8% fall of the number of people walking to work. (mình đọc không hiểu )
1. dùng từ không phù hợp , chưa tính lỗi lặp từ
2. sai chính tả
3. grammar : trong task 1 ( trừ map và process) không cần giải thích ( because, owning , due to .... không những được điểm mà còn bị trừ nếu sai ngữ pháp)
4. Coherent and cohension : câu cuối mình đọc không hiểu . Ban đầu bạn so sánh sự sụt giảm trong bike , vế sau bạn lại đi so sánh mức độ đó với foot ( mình hiểu ý bạn là muốn so sánh chênh lệch nhưng về mặt học thuật nó ko có ý nghĩa )
mình sửa ví dụ câu đó nhé : Although the percentage of bikers was higher than that of persons choosing to walk on foot in 1980 , the city then witnessed a reversed trend in the following two decades