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There is no doubt that reading books has played an important role in our lives for these reasons. Firstly, reading book is a simple way of acquiring precious knowledge. It helps us to reach out of the work, to discover new lands,concepts and people. For instance, you can know how amazing The United States is although you have never been to it. Secondly, reading books is a good idea we should come up with when we are under stress, because it helps both our mind and soul relax. Many people say that they feel entirely comfortable while reading books as it distracts them from all the problems they bump into in life.At last, reading books will improve our command of communication owing to increasing our vocabulary.Knowing exactly what other people are saying and using perfect words to convey your feelings is a crucial part of being a good human. To sum up, I suggest we spend more times reading books everyday.
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There are several mistakes in your paragraph:

- It helps us to reach out of (I think it should be "to apply it in work and the life") the work, to and discover new lands, concepts and people

- In your example, you shouldn't use "you" because it will refer to readers.

Secondly, reading books is a good idea that we should come up with when we are under suffer from stress because it helps to both our mind and soul relax release our pressure/ fresh our mind

Many people say that they feel entirely comfortable while reading books as it distracts them from all the problems they bump into in life (support for the second opinion => If people have troubles in their lives, enjoying books may relax themselves)

At last, reading books will improve our (the) command of communication owing to (in order to) increasing our (the) vocabulary

To sum up, I suggest we spend more times reading books everyday (=> it is recommended that people should spend time on reading books because of its huge benefits)

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There is no doubt that reading books has played an important role in our lives for these reasons.(topic sentence is clear) Firstly, reading book is a simple way of acquiring precious knowledge. It helps us to reach out of the work, to discover new lands,concepts and people. For instance, you can know how amazing The United States is although you have never been to it.(the supporting detail doesnt really support for your idea) Secondly, reading books is a good idea we should come up with when we are under stress(under pressure)because it helps both our mind and soul relax. Many people say that they feel entirely comfortable while reading books as it distracts them from all the problems they bump into in life.At last, reading books will improve our command of communication owing to increasing our vocabulary.Knowing exactly what other people are saying and using perfect words to convey your feelings is a crucial part of being a good human. To sum up, I suggest we spend more times reading books everyday.(it'll much more better if you develop your idea in specific example)

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