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Living in the modern life, people usually use the modern forms of communication. Those are email and message…Some people think that it has reduced the amount of time people spend for friends and has not good influences. I agree with that point, but I believe it has some benefit sides.

On the one hand, I agree that modern forms òf communications. It too easy to send mail so we can sent many email to chat with our friends. By the internet, we can talk to our friends anytime, anyplace. Sometime, we forget the time chatting to friends. Furthermore, we can chat to a group of friend at home. We do not go out to café shop or tea room to see our friends. By the time we become lazy and do not want go out. This has had a negative effect on our social lives.

On the other hand, I believe that modern forms of communication have some benefit side. In the past, we sent mail by mail sẻrvice. If we wanted to chat with our friends we have to met each others at the tea rooms, café shop… mightbe we spent all day for communication. Now based on internet we just take a small time to send email and addressee can read the email after few seconds. The most benefit I like, we can chat to parents when we are away…

Finally, modern forms òf communications may take time or not depends on the ways people use it, but I believe that we live in comfy life because of it.
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Living in the modern life, people usually use the modern forms of communication. Those are email and message…Some people think that it has reduced the amount of time people spend for friends and has not good influences. I agree with that point, but I believe it has some benefit sides.

On the one hand, I agree that modern forms (modern nhiều quá thì phải) òf communications. It too easy to send mail so we can sent many email to chat with our friends(lủng củng thì phải, chưa kể bạn còn mắc lỗi ngữ pháp ở vế đầu). By the internet,(cái này mình cũng không chắc nhưng thấy hơi lạ) we can talk to our friends anytime, anyplace. Sometime, we forget the time chatting to friends. (hình như là bạn diễn đạt hơi đơn giản quá, tăng thêm tính học thuật một chút thì có lẽ sẽ hay hơn)

Furthermore, we can chat to a group of friend at home. We do not go out to café shop or tea room to see our friends. By the time we become lazy and do not want go out. This has had a negative effect on our social lives.(chỗ này là 1 câu phức chứ nhỉ)

On the other hand, I believe that modern forms of communication have some benefit side. In the past, we sent mail by mail sẻrvice. If we wanted to chat with our friends we have to met each others at the tea rooms, café shop… mightbe we spent all day for communication. Now based on internet we just take a small time to send email and addressee can read the email after few seconds. The most benefit I like, we can chat to parents when we are away…

Finally, modern forms òf communications may take (much) time or not depends on the ways people use it, but I believe that we live in comfy life because of it.(hơi khó hiểu)


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