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Traveling is becoming one of the most interesting things that helps people discover many different cultures, types of food and have some awesome experiences. However, is it necessary to spend too much money on traveling or we need to save money for our further future? From my point of view, I disagree with the thought that spending money on traveling is better than saving money for the future because until someday, we will need money for our studying, taking care of our parents, and emergency situation.

First, we need to save money for tuition fees of advanced education. To become an excellent student and get a good salary job, you need to study more deeply for gaining higher level of skill, and this requires a large fees. For instance, my sister, Alex, who used to study in Technology College, to achieve the master level, she needed a large amount of money. Therefore, she saved money for one year and then she could get enter the master course for further study.  From the story of my sister, we know that we can save money for paying the tuition fees.

Second, saving money is important because we need to take care out parents in the future. To gratitude our parents’ love, their kindness and careness to us, we need to take care of them when they become older. For example, my cousins, Kevin, after he graduated the Colleges and found a good job, he started to save money. And after every three months, he sent to their parents 1000 dollars to take care of them because he worked far away from home. In short, we need to save money for the future because we should take care of our family members.

Thirdly, saving money is very necessary for emergency situations. There are many troubles take place unpredictably, especially, financial problems. What will happen if we do not have money in those cases? For example, my brother, John, he always saved a lot of money for the emergency cases. And one day, his company have a mistake in their products, so he must pay for the customers an amount of money to save his company’s reputation. In summary, because risks could happen everyday, we need to save money for emergency cases.

In conclusion, saving money for the future are more important than spending too much money on traveling because saving money helps us pay fees for studying, take care of our parents and emergency situations. Therefore, everybody should save moneys for yourself because it can help you a lot in your life.
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