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nowadays, with an increasingly popularity of mobile phones and computers, the ability to talk directly of people is being disappeared. in my opinion, i completely disagree with this

Firstly,Talking through mobile phone and computers bring a wide range of convenience. people could show their feeling easily to the others.for example, it is very romantic for the boy to send a message or make a call to declare his love to the girl.

secondly, mobile phones and computers play an important in deleting geographical barrier. instead of wasting several times contacting with someone that live in remote by going to there, people now find it much easier to communicate just stay at home  thanks to using mobile phones or computers.

in conclusion, i do not accept the argument  that because of development of mobile phones and computers, people will be unable to communicate face to face 

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nowadays, with an increasingly popularity of mobile phones and computers, the ability to talk directly of people is being disappeared. in my opinion, i completely disagree with this

Firstly,Talking through mobile phone and computers bring a wide range of convenience. people could show their feeling easily to the others.for example, it is very romantic for the boy to send a message or make a call to declare his love to the girl.

secondly, mobile phones and computers play an important in deleting geographical barrier. instead of wasting several times contacting with someone that live in remote by going to there, people now find it much easier to communicate just stay at home  thanks to using mobile phones or computers.

in conclusion, i do not accept the argument  that because of development of mobile phones and computers, people will be unable to communicate face to face

 

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á=Nowadays, with an increasingly popularity of mobile phones and computers, the ability to talk directly of-> to people is->are being disappeared. in my opinion, I completely disagree with this

-> Increasing

Firstly, Talking through mobile phone and computers bring a wide range of convenience. people could show their feeling easily to the others.for example, it is very romantic for the boy to send a message or make a call to declare his love to the girl -> show love for the girl.

secondly, mobile phones and computers play an important part in deleting geographical barrier. Instead of wasting several times contacting with someone that lives in remote by going to there, people now find it much easier to communicate just stay at home  thanks to using mobile phones or computers.

in conclusion, i do not accept the argument that because of development of mobile phones and computers, people -> human will be unable to communicate face to face 

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