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Some people think that school should reward the students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward  students who show improvements.

          Discuss both views and give your own opinion


            Giving reward is a most common way to compliment students on their attainments as well as motivate them to keep on their process. In my opinion, the value of students’ reward should be evaluated by their enhancements and educational results.

            There are a large number of difficult challenges students have to face in order to make a real improvement. Firstly, it is certain that students require a great deal of efforts to better their educational performance due to the great difficulties of higher-level knowledge. Secondly, while youth is a perfect age to get attached to the external factors such as all-night parties, loving affairs, video game..., students have to be capable of dictating these distractions which demands a huge bravery. Otherwise, it will engender their wasting a lot of time. Lastly, to actually better themselves, students need to step out of their comfort zone seeking for a more positive method, which is very challenging to indentify. Thefore, rewarding is necessary to encourge these students to keep their progress.

            However, the students who achieve the best academic results deserve the most valuable reward due to their continuously complex procress. To give an illustration, developing an all-round expertise in a subject necessitates various abilities from learners, ranging from a complete knowledge of theories to an old-hand in puting them into practice. Students are required to master a variety of subjects to actually stand out from the crowd. Furthermore, they have to maintain a persistent performance. In a highly competitive environment, a moment of unmindfulness barely result in his not obtaining the highest position.

            On the whole, the prizes given to students should be a mirror of their deeds.

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It is indisputable that rewards and incentives motivate individuals to keep working for better results and improvement. Students, particularly need this motivation to concentrate and keep focused in their studies. That is the only possible way by rewarding them for their achievement and efforts no matter whether they are higher score achieve or students who show improvement in their studies.

The students of all level try to improve when they have a feeling that their hard work is going to be appreciated. Many universities and colleges have rewards and scholarships programs so that the student can feel appreciated for the efforts they have made. Consequently, these little incentives and rewards play an indispensable role later in their career and practical life. 

On the other hand, many student also drops out from schools and universities just because they are not appreciated and encouraged to work hard so that they keep focused until they complete their studies. However, most of the time, average and weak students are discouraged and bullied in schools and universities. As a result, they decide to drop out and give up. Consequently, they end up doing work in factories as a labor with the feeling of an inferior complex. 

Universities and schools are required some amendments in their policies to address these issues and take appropriate steps in well and balanced manner to reward all students since everyone has a right to have a better career.

In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that all student must be appreciated for their achievements and encourage to work hard so that they can contribute to the world’s economies by being well- educated individuals. 

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