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There have existed endless discussions over investment in educational subjects. Universities and colleges' committee argues that sports and social activities should be given the same financial support as classes and libraries. Personally, I agree with this argument.

At the first analysis, it is of great necessity for educational specialists to invest in sport and social activities. It cannot be denied that investment in extracurricular activities creates chances for students to enlarge their social relationship. They are likely to meet and make friends with a great number of people, who share the same interest with them. For example, students, who find playing piano a great marvel, are certain to gather together in the piano club. They stand a golden chance not only to practice playing piano day by day but also to share with other members in the club their favorite composers as well as compositions. As a result, their social network is apparently expanded. More intriguingly, spending money in sports undoubtedly plays a crucial role in improving students' health. There is likelihood for students to activate every part of their bodies when they participate in physical activities. It undoubtedly leads to their burning of calories and their healthier immune system. They no longer suffer from diseases such as cold, obesity and so on. Indeed, putting money in sports and social activities brings social relationship's developments and health improvement.

At the second analysis, investing financial aid in classes and libraries is of paramount importance. It is well-noted that depositing money in classes equips students with a considerable amount of knowledge. With a considerable investment in classes, there are more and more modern devices which aim at education enhancement. It explicitly brings about the high quality lectures with vivid and lively images. As a result, students are supposed to be absorbed in lessons and remember them for such a long time. More notably, spending a quantity of money in libraries provides students with relaxing moments. Students are likely to have a wider range of options for the books to read. For example, libraries do not only contain academic books such as reference books, specific books but also stories as fictions, novels and so on. Accordingly, students are easily involved in reading interesting stories with unique plots and numerous characters. Students are certain to have more resting time with reading these delighting books. Without doubt, expending money in classes and libraries holds the equal cruciality.

In brief, for all the mentioned above, I highly recommend that universities and colleges' committee should take my paper into detailed consider to make a feasible decision on investment in sports, social activities and classes and libraries.
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hic, thú thực là mình ko rõ bạn đang mắc chỗ nào nữa. Cơ mà đây là trình tự các bước mà mình làm:
1. Cop toàn bộ bài của bạn trên vào word
2. Đọc và dò lỗi, chỗ nào lỗi thì strikethrough (cái nút 3 chữ a có gạch ngang í http://bit.ly/1kWvaAB)
3. Viết từ thay thế sang bên cạnh rồi bôi đỏ :I
4. Lặp lại cho đến hết bài :I
ôi, đơn giản thế mà không biết, cảm ơn bạn nhé. :)
hi, không có chi, có vấn đề gì bạn cứ hỏi nhen ^^

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