In the contemporary world, entertainment plays a core role in human life, especially in the youth life.Therefore, many things related1 to the entertainment has substantial influence on these young people and among these things, famous stars like film stars, singers or sport stars have impacted strongly. There is a considerable debate weather2 famous people are good examples for the youth or not. While I accept that the celebrities could not be a suitable pattern for teenagers, I am likely to assert that those are good one.
To begin with, the world of stars is so complex, so some argue that those living in this world cannot show a decent model for young people. Some singers, for instance, attempt to show up their body as sexy as possible to attract audiences. This could not say a right or wrong act, but it is definitely not appropriate for youth people. Moreover, few mistakes of the stars could lead these youth to misunderstand about success. Looking at sport stars, due to fame and money, some sports celebrities accepted to sell their soul to cheat or take drugs in order to win the game. These actions seem to send a message that everything can be off to take success. Thus, teenagers will be put on fire if let them follow these celebrities.
In contrast to this, I believe that many valuable lessons can be taught from famous stars. First of all, the celebrities could inspire about their occupation for the youth3 because those are willing to follow their idols. For example, footballers could give passion of football for teenagers that would encourage them to attend plays which assists them healthier. In fact, there are large number of famous people was in lower classes in the society4, but thank to their attempt5, they became famous and wealthy people6. Dinh Manh Ninh, a singer of Vietnam known as one of these is a prime example. These people, thus could teach young people about determination and efforts to surpass the fate. As a result, the celebrities could be decent teachers to educate teenagers.
In sum up, it seems to me that celebrities’ effect grants us an opportunity to teach juvenile generation many valuable lessons in life.
1. relating, rút gọn mệnh đề thể chủ động
3. inspire the youth with their occupation, inspire sb with sth
4. being lower classes of the society, rút gọn mệnh đề, một câu ko thể có hai động từ
5. but it thanks to their attempt, but+clause
6. famous and wealthy, cấu trúc song song ko thể adj+noun phrase đc
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