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Numerous companies want their staff to have a good-look when they are working, while some organizations believe that work performance is more important than appearance. This essay will discuss both viewpoints about this matter and also give my opinion about whether or not the employees should dress formally.
Nowadays, an increasing number amount of jobs require the staff to have uniform and also the good appearance. For instance, people working in business must have a suit with a tie, or stewards must wear the uniform that represent their airways. For summary, the jobs that always need communication must depend on clothing and appearance, cause many companies do not want their partners to be dissapointed in the first meeting.
However, many bosses of organisations always put the work performance above the appearance, this matter is quite easy to explain. It will not make any sense if the staff have a good look but they are performing very badly in their jobs. Another factor that contributes for this is some jobs require safety to be the most valuable quality. For example, workers in various construction absolutely need a helmet and protection clothes. Moreover, doctor or chef also have to wear gloves, clean their hands and equipments before performing something. These jobs do not need the fashioned clothes, and no one cares about the appearance either.
In my opinion, the clothes that employees have to wear must depend on their jobs. All of the staff must think about the most requirement in their occupation, so they can be easy to choose their clothes. Nonetheless, employees can change clothes in different occassions, they do not have to wear the same clothes in their whole working process.
By way of conclusion, we have many choices with clothing these days. People just have to choose the one that they feed most comfortable but still response the work requirements.
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Mình cũng không có góp ý gì nhiều, vì bản thân mình viết cũng còn sai nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và câu cú cũng chưa chặt.

Tuy nhiên, mình có ý kiến thế này:

1) "Moreover, doctor or chef also have to wear gloves, clean their hands and equipments before performing something." => mình nghĩ là để ở số nhiều, "doctors or chefs".

Nhưng mà vụ chefs đeo găng tay thì mình không sure lắm... 

2) "we have many choices with clothing these days." => bạn đang kết luận, nhưng lại viết "many choices", mình cảm thấy hơi bị rối. Có thể paraphrase lại: "These days, with plenty of styles and models, people can easily choose a proper clothes for work...."

Just my two cents, hope it helps.

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