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TOPIC: School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills.
Do you agree or disagree?

 

            Nowadays, technological advances and their rapid and wide applications are having a significant impact on numerous aspect of life. Schooling is not an exception, students now receive photocopy instead of messy ink and pen. Computer has been played an integral part in education, some consider it as an alarming effect to reading and writing skills, others see it as a stunning development. From my point of view, the latter’s idea is satisfactory.

            The first thing that should be taken into consideration is the amount of time that could be saved. Thank to computer, students no longer spend much time on copying information from blackboard. Alternatively, by this flexible device, information can be transformed through email imediately. Time that is saved could be used for several other purposes.

            Beside the point above, without computer, human must learned to cope with a serious problem – handwriting. For instance, doctor’s handwriting has been complained for years because of its illegible. Due to e-prescription, patient now could choose the right medicine without confusion.

            An other advantage of computer is that it could be connected to the Internet. The net lead us to a brand new world where information could easily be found just by a simple click of mouse. Through this system, student could find useful information easily at home regardless of the time or space’s problem.

            Hence, there is no doubt that what computer has been doing does numerous good for our kind. Instead of ignoring it, we should be more opend up to new technological developments./.

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 Nowadays, technological advances and their rapid and wide applications are having/ have exerted significant impacts on numerous aspects of life. Schooling is not an exception, students now receive photocopy instead of messy ink and pen. Computer has (been) played an integral part in education, some consider it as an alarming effect to reading and writing skills, others see it as a stunning development. From my point of view, the latter’s idea is satisfactory.

            The first thing that should be taken into consideration is the amount of time that could be saved. Thank to computer, students no longer spend much time on copying information from blackboard. Alternatively, by this flexible device, information can be transformed through email imediately/ immediately. Time that is saved could be used for several other purposes.

            Beside the point above, without computer, human must learned to cope with a serious problem – handwriting. For instance, doctor’s handwriting has been complained for years because of its illegible/ illegibility. Due to e-prescription, patient now could choose the right medicine without confusion.

            An other advantage of computer is that it could be connected to the Internet. The net leads us to a brand new world where information could easily be found just by a simple click of mouse. Through this system, student could find useful information easily at home regardless of the time or space’s problem.

            Hence, there is no doubt that what computer has been doing does numerous good for our kind. Instead of ignoring it, we should be more opend up to new technological developments./.

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